Here is something new. I know it's another mess, but here goes nothing:
 
https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445/the-ballad-of-barney-clive-oct-2016
 

Works well this...
 
Cute song, has your stamp all over it
 
nice work... Like the change-up at 2:04... And throughout, this is quite a technical song and it kept my interest for the distance. Lots of comedy events...
 
cheers
 
andy

This has you stamped all over it, could I offer any advice probably not, thanks for sharing though.

Have you ever listened to any Flanders & Swan?

Wow! This is wild! How can you speak those lyrics so quickly and keep perfect clarity? Excellent job!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lNU5KVa_Tu8

i love the concept and the little acoustic flourishes, but ultimately it's the music, and 1'50 in to change the key a little, and then go into the double time section is beautiful
the further new section around 4'40 is also a lovely bit of ear candy
however overall this seems more disjointed than previous efforts. i'd like more vocal variation in the 'trad' sections and something more of a hook in the song as a whole

Girl, you knock me out.
 
Get yourself an agent and sell this stuff for commercials and movies.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

synchrotron - andy, Wookiee, String Jammer - Scott, mgh and Jesse Q. Screed, thank you all very much for your comments and support. Notes taken to heart. :)
 
LJ

After listening to this, I'm finding hard to arrange my thoughts into a sentence. :)
 
I liked it, very clever, from the lyrics to the music. I kept thinking "Dr. Demento came too early" because he would have loved this song to pieces.
 
I guess it's so concept-driven and specific to your vision that it leaves the language of ordinary critique far behind. Mine, anyway.
 
So I can only commend it, and you, on your . . . your . . . idosyncraticality. Had to make up a new word to do you justice.
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 

Idosyncraticality excellent.
Fantastically nonlinear.
Brilliantly quirktastic.