emeraldsoul Tom and daryl1968: Thank you so much for taking the trouble to listen and comment. You both made me laugh - thanks for that, too 

Really cute song.  Vocals could be clearer.

Thank you for listening, philz!

I've been concerned with what philz commented on - that the vocals could be clearer. Probably because I know what the words are supposed to be (duh :) ) they sound okay to me. It could also be that my headphones promote the vocal abnormally.
 
I've been wondering if they sound unclear to other listeners, too? I know the song needs cohesion (and, as usual, paring down), but should I try to improve the clarity of the vocal while I'm at it?
 
Thanks!
LJ
 
 

FWIW, I can understand most of the lyrics, but you are singing a bit "softly" so maybe that could be a factor frequency-wise?   Still don't know how you deliver the words that articulate either way though, I'd be stumbling all over the place.
 
Anyhow...  another well done, clever, stream-of-consciousness song.   Love the sound effects you added to go along with the various voices in your head, that's good stuff.  And of course, the changes in tempo and feel throughout are sooo you.     And yes, I do get it - fall, trip... 

I just love you. You put out some of the most amazingly original music. This is just fantastic.

stevec SteveC, thank you, I "fall, trip" over your commentary :)
 
MarkusClinus Mark, you couldn't have said anything more encouraging. Thank you very much!
 
LJ

Hey Laura, this is another uber-creative piece from you.  I had trouble following (understanding -- not hearing) all of the lyrics and because of that the song's impact didn't...well...impact me.  In a narrative piece it's crucial that the lyrics be totally audible -- of course, it could be fixed in the mix. Musically, this has some good stuff going which keep the song interesting but for me, the song didn't quite gell.  But, it does showcase your unique writing/performing abilities and your special talent(s).  !!  
 
Allan
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Hi Allan,
It's always nice to hear from you! 
Thanks very much for your comments - notes taken. 
Hope the next one turns out better.
Thanks again,
LJ
 

...but a quirky beautiful mess! Not many 7-minute songs I can listen to all the way, but this one kept me to the last note.
(I know I'm late to the party. Don't get to this forum very often.)