StriJam,
def a great song and effort.
I'm wondering though, if maybe it is a bit busy. I think you might want to pull some of the instruments back in places. Might it lend a little more emotion to the piece? I just seems like it goes like a jackrabbit front to end.
However, the capture, performance, and rendering, are top motch.
Very skillful by all involved.
Jesse Q. Screed