This song is in really rough shape, but I'm wondering whether it might be worth working on further and hoping someone will give it a listen and say whether or not they think it's got any appeal under all the present mess
 
Thank you for your bravery,
LJ
 
P.S. I know I'd have to record again from scratch - I'm just wondering whether the underlying song material is worth the effort.
 
Edit: I tried to make some improvements this morning. They didn't really work, so I've spent the day trying again. Here is the newest link (Sept. 5, 3rd version): https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445
 
Thanks for your patience.
LJ
 
 

Incredible...really love your work.  

eph221, you've always been so kind to me. Thank you so much for that very generous comment.
 
I worried all week about posting this song, knowing what a mess I made of this version of the recording, and also knowing that this version is the only one I have, because "the dog ate the individual tracks" and so, to change anything, I have to start all over. 
 
All I have left of this song on my hard drive is one sort-of-mixed track, this one. In a way, I'm glad I at least made this crummy, tinny mix of tracks 1-24 down to Track 25 before lightning struck. I still don't remember why I did that. Anyway, I'm glad I did because, no matter how misguided the mix, that's the only track that still exists of the song at all.
 
Sheesh, I wish I could just play and sing and some magic power would do all the recording, mixing, mastering and saving to Fort Knox for me. I'd sleep a lot better.
 
Thanks again for your kindness, eph 221 :)
LJ
 

You should definitely take this on again. Very cool songery here.
 
-Tom

This song made me feel like, f**k Gary!!!
 
F**k him in his stoopid assh**le!!!
 
Nice one!

Sounds like it is worth your time reexamining this, you never know where it might end up.

I say yes, you are a great lyricist (I hope people really take the time to listen to the lyrics.), a great songwriter, and a great musician.  I definitely dig the guitar at 1:51.  I love the timing changes too.  I say go and go hard.  You might have to start over, but you have your reference track right here.  But, I know how hard it is to start over.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

emeraldsoul: Thank you, Tom. You've always been very encouraging and I really appreciate it.
 
Royal Yaksman, ha ha! 
 
Thanks, Wookiee; I value your advice.
 
Jesse Screed, that was super nice of you to say. Thank you so much for the kind words. 
 

C'mon, Laura, you know it's worthwhile...   Despite the mix it still sounds like it comes from the same place as the more recent songs you've posted.   Go for it.   
 
 

Love it - get on with it.