I've been away from the forum for a while so this is the first tune of your's that I'm hearing.  While it's obviously a very original and creative tune, I personally don't think the mix is doing it or your voice justice.  I'm not sure if it's a matter of level or something else, but I'd suggest starting with vocal level.  Just my humble opinion.

Thank you, String Jammer and philz, for your kind remarks and advice. Mixing is something I'm (obviously) not too good at, and I'm hoping to improve by taking everybody's suggestions to heart. 
 
LJ

Hi Laura, full marks for originality as usual. You can hear that you are having a good time doing your very creative best.
 
I just heard the last 5th version, and I'd vote for turning the bass down just a little. It will give the higher frequencies more space to shine.
 
I'd also take a look at how you are processing your cymbals / hi hats. Do you have a flanger on them? What plugins are on them? And, pretty important - are you starting your recordings in 16 bit or 24 bit?   44.1 or 48 or 88.2?   What kind of soundcard are you using?
 
I'd recommend starting in 24 bit / 44.1   but others may think . . . otherwise. When you export your "entire mix" does it go to .wav, or to a .mp3? If mp3, are you exporting it to mp3 128??? that would flange everything up a bit for sure.
 
 
Sorry for all the numbers, I'm kind of curious about your setup and process, because something sounds a little overprocessed and your songs are just too good not to optimize.
 
cheers,
-Tom

Hi Tom, 
 
Thank you for the kind critique and for the thoughtful questions you asked. 
 
You're absolutely right with your comment about the over-processed sound - I did try to correct that from mix #4 to mix #5 but my impatience and well, crummy ears got in my way and this one ended up being not very good. It may be time for me to reconsider this whole recording thing. 
 
Thanks again for taking the time and trouble. I appreciate it very much.
 
LJ
 

Everyone's got you covered as regards the mix, so I'll just say I really enjoyed the song, very individual and creative.

Thanks for the nice words, jamesg1213 :)
 

New mix on 7-16 sounds good!
 

Very quirky and cool Ms Lampshade.
Mixwise, I would like to hear the vocal with less reverb and up in the mix

Ms Lampshade - 
 
agree very quirky, nice performances
 
mix really needs some adjustments (vocals too processed/wet, overall mix too compressed, guitars too loud)
 
song is pretty cool, tho!  performances are good!

Hi again everybody,
Thank you again for all your help. I tried to take your advice again, and here is what came out:
https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445/you-better-move-in-july-2016-h
https://soundcloud.com/laura-thomson-723335445
 
There's less compression, guitars, bass and reverb on the voice and more volume on the drums and voice. Here's hoping!
 
Thank you all again for putting up with this!
LJ