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2016/07/13 17:15:22
daryl1968
Hi folks
Here's a new one that I just finished recording.
Hope you enjoy - nits and crits welcome.
 
https://soundcloud.com/skyblueproductions/abigail
 
Abigail
Written and performed by Staypress (daryl1968)

Verse 1
There was a time, before my prime when friends were hard to come by
I must admit, it hurt a bit and made me wonder why

Prechorus
Before you appeared my life was a mess
I was a loner I have to confess
Then you found me and opened my eyes
I learned to love to my surprise
 
Chorus
Abigail, you beautiful thing
You light up my day in a wonderful way and never ask for a thing
Abigail you beautiful thing
There's never a day when you don't make me say
'You make my heart sing'

Verse 2
I found it hard to be off my guard - quite a sad existence
So in you came to shelter from the rain, the path of least resistance
 
Prechorus
 
Chorus
 
Middle bit
I fed you
I bathed you
i had you spayed
You're such a great cat I'm glad you stayed

Chorus to end
2016/07/13 18:09:15
eph221
I have to admit I jumped out of my chair when you said *I had you spayed*.  haha  (didn't know it was about your pussy until then).  I don't know what it is about your voice Daryl, but everything always sounds like squeeze, madness, or petshop boys , sorry to pigeon hole you!  meow.
2016/07/14 08:44:53
dcumpian
Cool song...in the spirit of "Martha My Dear".
 
Overall, the mix is quite good, however, in the quieter sections, the voice high end sounds just a little too brittle. Sounds great when everything else comes in. I'd suggest automating an EQ curve to soften it a bit when things are sparser.
 
Regards,
Dan
 
2016/07/14 09:16:12
emeraldsoul
Catchy chorus, nice sparse arrangement, cool vocals plus harmony, very slick modulations right at the end! Yes, with a twist as well.
 
Your songs always seem to hit the target between quirk and pop - perfectly. Well done again.
 
My only crits are 1 billion percent subjective as far as the arrangement of things go. For me it was a little too sparse. I'd take your bass notes and let each sustain longer, where you have clipped them. And other times, I wanted to hear a pad sound underneath your vocals (occasionally you throw a psycho space organ underneath, which I quite liked) just to help fill things out. But I can tell you didn't want to fill things, you were going for sparse. Nailed it.
 
The chord sequence you cooked up here is a fantastic fit for your melody, particularly in the chorus. Cool songwriting indeed, in a nice, distinctly separated mix.
 
-Tom
 
 
 
 
2016/07/14 10:34:02
Wookiee
Another classic from Staypress, I must admit I smiled when you hit the spay and cat lyric, before that I thought it was about your dog.  The production as ever is nice a clear, though I thought the thump (kick) in the opening phrase was perhaps a little to present.  The lyric does sound a little fragile in places perhaps something, EQ or subtle distortion or even a pad sound, to soften the top end might help.  Thanks for sharing.
2016/07/14 11:10:41
kloon
Brilliant! :)
2016/07/14 15:27:42
Serious_Noize!
Really like this one Daryl, I have to agree the vocals have a bit too much treble going on with them to fit with the rest of the mix. Although full disclosure, I got some new monitor speakers for my PC just a few days ago, nothing fancy but they have a truer sound as to what I am hearing than what I have been using before so I am happy with them. Sounds great! Just a little high treble on the vocals. Or too much clarity, but I am no mix master so take my words as a grain of sand my friend.
 
Enjoyed hearing this one, you always have some great songs and performances, my favorite will always be "Damned If I Do".

Thanks for sharing the listen! As for my opinion, I'm just trying to be helpful. 
 
 
2016/07/14 20:51:50
daryl1968
eph221
I have to admit I jumped out of my chair when you said *I had you spayed*.  haha  (didn't know it was about your pussy until then).  I don't know what it is about your voice Daryl, but everything always sounds like squeeze, madness, or petshop boys , sorry to pigeon hole you!  meow.


I'll take them as a comparison. Thanks for the listen mate.
2016/07/15 09:49:28
Mesh
Excellent Daryl!!
Very pleasant music/lyrics to listen to......I've always been a fan of Staypress!! Mix sound great (listening on my phone/H-phones)....very crisp/clear/well balanced.  
2016/07/15 12:12:24
Rimshot
Good job! I like the song. Like "glad you stayed....meow!"
 
Sounds great on my PC speakers. 
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