EDIT: all gone.... working on new version.. thanks for the help!

hello Sir, anything I say will be all a matter of taste.
 
1.  I like the song, it is good. I really like the guitar part.
2.  I like less reverb.
3. I like the vocals to be more out front.
4. I like the drums to be back just a bit.
5. I like a little bit more bump in the mids.
6.  I like the song, it is good.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Thank you for the advise! I will use it. :)
Just don't call me Sir anymore.. lol ;) ha!

Interesting.....indy/60s vibeishh .....cool.    curious what vox effect ?
Agree with Screeds points.  It sounds like your in a bit hall or end of a tunnel a bit ...with my headcans on ....which is fine if thats the intention...could be a cool vid/movie backround.   I actually have a song i will eventually share that has a very similar vibe...that eastern vibe....sorry rambling this am ;o)..
  I would also consider (and I am currently guilty with both my songs up right now of this...) ....maybe breaking up the "non-stop" guitar....I like it on the one hand...but maybe another version where it opens/breaks the song up ...though it would change its vibe a bit ..... Its deff cool though....thx for share....

Thanks for the input :) as far as Vox FX, I use everything on everything and mix as I go bouncing to a new track so things get lost along the way.
I figure me being me will come out as art and moving that direction as I learn.
60s vib... Some say Iron Butterfly 60s, or Love and Rockets. I had never listened to those band in the past.
I'm starting to get that I'm playing too much guitar, someone else told me that over the weekend.
I think I just mixed it with generic 15" PA mains that where like 20 feet away.
The mid-eastern sound…. Lol, yeah I don’t get why it sounds like that but for the way I play guitar.
My right hand is kind of paralyzed, I duct tape a pick to my thumb to play so I developed into a hammer/string bender player…
 
I’ll keep an eye out for your music…
 
Peace!

Right on .....overall...very cool stuff in my book ....keep it up  ;o)
 

Mid-eastern influenced Iron Butterfly?   Maybe...  
 
It is a pretty cool song, though I'd use the previous comments to help bring more clarity to the overall mix/arrangement.
 

Good atmosphere
****in guitar lick
Interesting vocal
 
ideas:
needs more dynamics, too much of the same thing at the same levels
drop the guitar on a verse, just sing thru with only bass and drums
needs some pad underneath it, real subtle but can glue things together
 

jamesyoyo
Good atmosphere
****in guitar lick
Interesting vocal
 
ideas:
needs more dynamics, too much of the same thing at the same levels
drop the guitar on a verse, just sing thru with only bass and drums
needs some pad underneath it, real subtle but can glue things together
 

Thanks! I just saw this... I hope you like my comments to you as well :)
Peace!

I was in a rush on last post. Just want to thank all who checked out my song and commented. Advise well heard…
 
peace!