Hi! Let me show you a song of mine called: Giving all.
I have written an english lyrics again.
 
Please consider:
1.: This is a demo.
2.: I'm not too much of a singer.
3.: english is not my native language.
 
https://soundcloud.com/user-621970950/givingall

Nice song! Having the vocal come up an octave sometime during the song would be nice I think. I'd also suggest taking some reverb/room out of the kick. Now you need to add background vocals.
 
Regards,
Dan

I don't know  if this is the right place to tell that I am very very content with My Sonar Platinum and the lifetime update!!!.
Every month it will be better,
 
That's why I tell my friends go to Sonar, the best software for  making music.
 
 
Sonar, Go on this way and anyway thanks for the updates we get.
Ron Eerhart

good song with good lyrics.  Your voice reminds me of Lou Reed's but it'd be strange hearing him sing these lyrics! :D  I agree you need to give some variety to the vocal track.  I'm curious as well, when you say *this is a demo* what do you mean?  Because what I intuit is that you mean *this is a demo so it's not as polished*.  Those people that sift through demos have absolutely no imaginations.  Demo's have to be perfect these days. :D:D  Just sayin.

Dan and eph221,
 
Thanks very much for listening and commenting.
 
@Dan: yes the vocals "tested my nerves"... and its still not good... I'll find out something. And also I have to buy a good microphone... I hope soon.
 
@eph221: yes by saying it is demo I meant it is not polished. Actually my equipment is limited so I don't think it will ever be polished to perfection . Actually I am not aiming to be discvered by a major music company. I record some ideas as a hobby, get some ideas from here from the comments and try to do them (whatever I can) and things like this.
Actually you surprised me with the Lou Reed comparison... but maybe you are right...

humanrock
Dan and eph221,
 
Thanks very much for listening and commenting.
 
@Dan: yes the vocals "tested my nerves"... and its still not good... I'll find out something. And also I have to buy a good microphone... I hope soon.
 
@eph221: yes by saying it is demo I meant it is not polished. Actually my equipment is limited so I don't think it will ever be polished to perfection . Actually I am not aiming to be discvered by a major music company. I record some ideas as a hobby, get some ideas from here from the comments and try to do them (whatever I can) and things like this.
Actually you surprised me with the Lou Reed comparison... but maybe you are right...

I just read an article that says that streaming royalties are great for record companies and they're on the prowl.  Unfortunately, the flip side is that artists are making very little.  :D:D