I will torment you with 2 songs, first this.
 
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13426234&q=hi
 
Jesse Q.   Screed
 
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Yep. listened to 'em both, I found myself liking this one a little more . . . I like the percussive sound that moves around in panning, like you are banging a piece of flexible drain pipe. I think the audio quality in this one is a little better than the other.
 
Super creative and very original! But for whatever reason, when you do quirky love songs they hold my interest a little longer, just my opinion there. Your vocal has a cool quality to it, and I wonder if you ever thought of doubling it (actually singing it twice as opposed to making a copy) and then adding some nice microshifting or chorus? Just a thought, I bet that would sound pretty ****in' . . . hope I can say that on TV.
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 ****no I guess I can't. Oh well.  :)

Thanks esoul, I love the suggestions.  I'll try that on my next piece.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Loved your song!  Loved it, everything was great!  Alas, when one goes to war, the truth is the first casualty!
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
(no, really I love it!)

I'm in the same space as when I listened to the Peas song.  I honestly don't know what to think.  But, I will listen till I do.  You are a spaceman, aren't you?

eph221
Loved your song!  Loved it, everything was great!  Alas, when one goes to war, the truth is the first casualty!

Yes, the truth is hard to find these days.
 

evadianepug
I'm in the same space as when I listened to the Peas song.  I honestly don't know what to think.  But, I will listen till I do.  You are a spaceman, aren't you?

I live on the planet earth, the earth is in space, so I guess that make me a spaceman.  That make you one too.  Give peas a chance.  Thanks for listening.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Nice and quirksome. The song has finished and it's still going around my head which is a good sign right?
I love the backing vocals but mix-wise the interfere with the main vocal at times. Maybe take some bottom end off or pan them hard left and right?

daryl1968
Nice and quirksome. The song has finished and it's still going around my head which is a good sign right?
I love the backing vocals but mix-wise the interfere with the main vocal at times. Maybe take some bottom end off or pan them hard left and right?

Yes, you are correct.  Thank you.
 
I will remix soon.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Screedily quirky, exactly as expected.   
 
For me it has a bit of Magical Mystery Tour oddness in spots, particularly the BGVs. 

Def not ever gonna be on American Top 40 radio.
 
And I mean that in a good way.
 
Keep letting your freq flag fly JQS.