Wookiee
Made me smile and I thought of 20st Century Schizoid Man in the initial vocal.

Wow a King Crimson fan - Wook you just made my year!!! ;) 
 

Since now I am tasting writing lyrics in english first I checked your words. Now I am not an internationally well-known and acknowledged poet () so my opinion might not be a gigantic milestone in the life of your band but I think the lyrics is well written. At some point it might be "raw" but the style can handle it I guess.
I like the ending and the "atmosphere" of the song.

This mix is stellar!  I'll be listening to this until it disappears. 

I definitely like the sound of this song.  First thought was Alice In Chains but not as heavy.  I love the pictures you paint with the words, though personally (and not a dig on you), I feel going with the f-bombs detracts from the impact and genius of the rest of the words.  It's like you have $500 words with a few 50c words thrown in.  Kinda cheapens it.  This is just my opinion as someone that doesn't like to use or hear that kind of language, but I'm not judging.  I promise.  
 
Musically, this is a great mix.  I honestly can't think of anything I'd change as for as music / mix goes.  Thanks for sharing this. 

Midiboy
I definitely like the sound of this song.  First thought was Alice In Chains but not as heavy.  I love the pictures you paint with the words, though personally (and not a dig on you), I feel going with the f-bombs detracts from the impact and genius of the rest of the words.  It's like you have $500 words with a few 50c words thrown in.  Kinda cheapens it.  This is just my opinion as someone that doesn't like to use or hear that kind of language, but I'm not judging.  I promise.  
 
Musically, this is a great mix.  I honestly can't think of anything I'd change as for as music / mix goes.  Thanks for sharing this. 

hey thanks for bringing this up in fact. i myself actually debated over it for the same reasons; one of those being my 2-year-old little rocker who loves it but I make him listen to a private censored version lol - my buddy Chris came in with his rant and F-bomb laden "phone poetry" all over the place, which fit the "tone" of the song, societal alienation and basically living in a cubicle at work 70% of your life etc-- the death of the America dream - 
 
but the "character" of the story actually speaks like that. it's actually based on a co-worker who destroyed his cubicle one day after being fired then wrote all this sappy angry suicidal crap on Facebook - hence the lyrics - but his life was truly destroyed by a corporate takeover and firing. there are some subtle political references, more at a political zeitgeist with a bit of a fist bump to my Mexican friends, of whom I have many, living here in Florida etc- but less at a political song and more at a social commentary/ mirror song etc- inside an artistic soundscape that combines a few styles 
 
your point is very well taken tho- thanks again - 
 
- Daren T 
 

Mikalization
the bassist is so good

wow. Dan (MRI bassist) is actually on extended job training in Colorado so I ended up tracking the bass myself on this one. I don't play with a pick - my attack isn't as good as Dan's but I just wanted a healthy bass presence as the song is odd/unique in a lot of ways enough and didn't wish to make too busy bass-wise. I didn't venture out into many fills and just kept it simple K.I.S.S. approach lol 
 
thanks bro - 
 
Daren 

Clearest vocal I have heard on your music!  Ha, how ya doin, buddy?  I actually really like this song.  Instruments are great and I liked the singer.  It makes me want to pick up the bass and add all kinds of effects and just SOLO for an hour.  Of course it would suck but that's what I want to do listening to this.  Animal music.  Man, Daren, I really love this!

Well now that was just fun as hell.  I really dig this tune.  Very nice job here.  Lyrics were great, too. 
 
So what effects were you using on the vox anyways? 

Good stuff.  Agree with Lynn, et. al., good lyrics deserve to be heard.  You got 'em... let us hear 'em.