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2016/07/14 18:33:43
eph221
This is a song I'm shopping. if you're unkind after listening to it it's ok, I will have failed in my attempts to lift your spirits.  It will have been my fault!
 
 https://soundcloud.com/da.../simplesam-final-draf
 
Listen to revision instead:
 
https://soundcloud.com/da...214/simplesam-revision
 
 
2016/07/15 10:41:50
daryl1968
I like it David - very upbeat. I do not have any nits or crits with the song or performances.
Not sure if the mix matters when you're shopping a song but it sounds a little muddy to me.
2016/07/15 13:33:02
eph221
Daryl,  thank you so much for listening.  *muddy* is a very useful critique actually.  I appreciate the input.
2016/07/15 13:35:49
daryl1968
Sorry to be unspecific. I mean too much low/mid.
Really like the song.
2016/07/15 13:38:22
eph221
No I'm being serious!  I understand *muddy* it's more of a big picture understanding of the mix.
2016/07/15 13:41:23
daryl1968
eph221
No I'm being serious!  I understand *muddy* it's more of a big picture understanding of the mix.


Cool.
2016/07/15 14:01:36
Beagle
Hey David, starting out I like this!  It's a little "country" and I'm not a big country fan, but you've done well with this.
 
the organs' leslie sounds odd though (gated?)............ ping ponged!  no, that doesn't sound right.
 
the overall mix is very compressed, I'd encourage you to back off the master limiter.
 
hmmm...not sure what's going on at the bridge - that was kind of odd.  
 
key changes were too abrupt and the vocals sound like you've just cloned them from the previous key and pitch shifted them.  very phasey sounding after that 2nd key change.
 
I think it went down hill for me when the bridge started.  prior to that, I was jammin and shoppin...
2016/07/15 15:59:28
eph221
Beagle I totally agree.  When I originally wrote it what is now the second verse was actually a full bridge (twice the luck and fortune befalls the man...etc).  It wasn't even a verse.  So we switched things up.  The angel thing worked better with that set up rather than the way it came out.  We'll have to revisit it.  Also I want to change it to *easy rider in a motor jam* .  Thanks for listening.
2016/07/15 21:41:43
BASSJOKER
catchy tune.....strangely...I thought i heard this on a local radio station here not long ago ?...I agree with the stated mix issues...anyway....good luck with it !
2016/07/16 02:13:48
emeraldsoul
I'd take a little compression or volume off of that bass. Nice tune though, I could sense a little Hootie vibe in there! 
 
You might listen to the bass doing its thing in the breakdown section, it sounds just a little overcooked.
 
cheers,
-Tom
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