Thank you for the feedback wookie and gruverider!

Interesting chord progression, nice melody and good lyrics.   There seem to be a few "clashes" of dissonance, perhaps an errant chord/note here and there, but the overall movement is really strong as the song progresses.  Mix-wise the vocals seem to get a bit lost when things are really taking off, but otherwise everything seems clear and laid out well. 
 

Thanks for the observations Steve!

so as of today, my song has had 113 views and the new forum monkey's song *love will come your way* has had over 1010.