Since 2 months I try to do my own songs.
It is build around a bass motif.

 
This is my first post here, hope you enjoy.

LInk:  https://soundcloud.com/fergusonbbb/of-dancing-bears-and
 
 

fergus - you can't post links until you've made 5 posts and have been here for 3 days, or something like that.
 
looks like Ultrabra posted the link for you.
 
This is quite nice.  I'm not a great critiquer for this type of music, but the mix sounds pretty good to me.  thanks for sharing

Ok, thank you for your kind words. And thank you ULTRABRA:
 

I think your mix holds up well! I liked the synth choices and the high quality noodling!
 
Your first bass line comes in at a relatively high volume, after you set them up from the beginning with quiet parts. People might be jumping for the volume knob . . .  ?
 
After listening to it, I can still remember the lines. That's a good sign!
 
I kind of wanted a bridge to a "chorus" because it got a little samey after a while, but you insert the break and that does reset the attention span, thank you!
 
Very cool tune and good job! Through the mists of time, I can see William Perry dancing in the end zone.  :)
 
cheers,
-Tom

Tom, thank you for your clear words. I started the bassline so loud to introduce the bear.
I´m still struggling with mixing and holding all together.

I quite like this, the Bass is a bit on the strong side to begin with and as Tom says it can sound tad samey which can be dealt with by adding some ear candy just to divert fora second or two.  Thanks for sharing.

i thought this was really well done. you built in enough contrast and dynamics to hold the attention, and some of the synth choices were inspired. not sure what category this belongs in, it would work as chill-out/ambient but also as a soundtrack. mix was excellent too.

It started with the dancebearstory. You find them even today in several countries. So I wanted a bear(s) ( bass )
who was set free to dance on his own on the mountain of Sound ( stacked sounds ). It was expired by
 Mussorgsky - Pictures of.... I wanted finally  use some of the plugins I bought because of gas as ou say.
Dawwise I´m pretty inexperiencied.To tell the truth I feel like a dummy concerned to what you can do with sonar.
But I see that this is not worthless, although it is samey as you said. It was my first piece with more than 10
tracks, and believe it or not I used less than 4 effect plugins in total.