Just had a listen to the second version...    I kinda liked the width and didn't hear anything harsh EQ-wise.   Sure, some of the sounds may be a bit dated, but overall I also think it sounds pretty good.

I must be listening to the updated version because it all sounds good to me.  Great separation on the instruments and to my tired old ears the panning doesn't sound all that wide.  I like the light, airy, jazzy feel to this number.
 
Nice one Lynn.  I always enjoy your stuff!!

you nailed it this time!!! left some comments on your SC ;) 

Steve, Freddy, and Daren thanks for taking the time and your comments.  Batsbrew also did two treatments for this, which I'll be posting this weekend.  I have to say, it's come a long ways since its inception in '95.

On my system it sounds perfect Lynn! Wow! I had it cranked too! Listened 3 times.   I can't think of anything I would do to it but you should try every suggestion! Especially if it comes from Gonzo!! I like the wideness

I think it's a good job on EQing the master. Though the low end is tight and well defined, I think it needs a boost of about 1db or 1.5db. This is hard to say though. I've been listening to a lot of different music on my speakers and I've noticed a wide variety of how engineers approach the low end. Some go with a similar approach to yours but most tend to go more in the bass and not so much the kick so I guess there is no wrong way as what you have is very clear. Though, again, I think it needs more low end.

great full sound
you obviously nailed it with this remix
nice proggy tune too. you forgot the guitars but oh well...

Bill, I'm very pleased that you like this.  I think I got the wideness just about right this time, but as you say, I should take any suggestion from Gonzo, and I did.  See below.
 
Robert, I really appreciate your time and opinion.  I now have two more versions by Batsbrew to consider.
 
Mark, thank you for listening.  As for the guitars, this was a MIDI only song that I wrote to familiarize myself with sequencing.  At that time, I would have had to sync the sequencer to one track of my tape recorder in order to add an audio track.  I just didn't want to mess with it then until I got a handle on editing on a one-note-at-a time event list.
 
Batsbrew, graciously offered to master this song, and he gave me two versions with different EQ curves.  I offer them to you for your consideration.  They can be found here:  #1 http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13394912&q=hi, and here: #2  http://www.soundclick.com...ngid=13394913&q=hi
 
My hats off to all of you.
 
 

lynn,
for the record,
they were not fully mastered,
i only tweaked your eq, and did not change the overall level.
 
if you would like,
i could give it the full treatment!
 

Take your time here Lynn. Take days before you decide on a final or best mix. It is your song so go with your instincts. The cool thing is you have choices and all are excellent!!!
I'm not saying which is my pick. That's your choice! Trust yourself!