Really evocative mood in this one.
 
The vocals IMHO need to be moved waaay back, cut a lot of bottom eq out and washed in some reverb to fit the track better. Some tuning on the long held vocal notes would help some too.
 
Did not care for the dramatic change at 2:25...I think it undercut the mood. The drums should be huge, and this kinda only went half way there.
 
 I could do a polish on this in an hour that would really make it shine.

Hah, funny, I guess I over-corrected the initial version where the vocals were too far back.  I am still learning the vocal side of things after years of doing instrumentals or remixes so appreciate the feedback.  I'll take another stab at it and maybe sit on it awhile before reposting.  Thanks James.

Thanks for sharing.
 
Everyone else has already covered any nits to be addressed.
 

lovely.....I think I'd used a different verb on the vox in the verses....not sure what treatment your using...if your doubling the vox I might try to spread it a bit...but for some reason its not working for me..
 
the rest of the tune is outstanding....

Thanks James, Bapu and Tom, I've updated it to reflect your feedback.