https://soundcloud.com/us...430027/shes-a-knockout
 
She's a Knockout Lyrics....
 
Verse 1:
 Tell ya somethin'
bout a girl I know
She steals the show where ever she goes
She's awfully sexy .... she's awfully sweet
Keep your gloves up or she'll sweep you off your feet
 
Bridge:
when I look in her eyes, she melts my heart away
I never knew it would be so strong
I'm prayin' she'll stay
 
Chorus:
She's a Knockout
She'll put you on the canvas tonight
You better watchout
She'll send  you straight to Heaven on a one way flight
 
Vocal Improv:
 
Verse 2:
Have ya had enough?
Do you want more?
She's got the moves you just can't ignore
She's irresistible, she looks so cool,
If you're not careful she'll make you out the fool
 
Bridge:
Chorus:
Outro:

Nice intro
Nice guitar tone
Nice vocal
Nice bgvs
Nice drums & sound
Bass is good but could use just a bit more definition IMO
Nice production
 
No real crits here
 
 

What Bapu said...except for the bass part. He's a bass player and it needs to be right up there with the vocal to make him happy, lol.
 
That intro solo is very tasty...
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Ed  I'm glad you liked it!
This is one of the first songs I layed down when I got Splat.  When I recorded the bass gtr I instead of playing closer to the bridge I was playing much more forward and with a $250 Ibanez 5 string it's not the best place to get a good mid tone so I either re- record that part or try and eq it a little more without making it sound any worse. 
 
My nemesis at this point like so many others is low end mud and overall mix clarity. But I'll keep working it. Just picked up some different monitors that are a little more bass heavy than the Yamaha HS5's. Hopefully I'll be able to hear the low end a little better. Thanks for the critique!
Craig 

dcumpian
What Bapu said...except for the bass part. He's a bass player and it needs to be right up there with the vocal to make him happy, lol.
 
That intro solo is very tasty...
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Thanks Dan,
 
Dan,
Are you available to put some keys to a slow song I'm working out..... If you like it?
 
I'm really blown away with your stuff.
Craig

CSW

dcumpian
What Bapu said...except for the bass part. He's a bass player and it needs to be right up there with the vocal to make him happy, lol.
 
That intro solo is very tasty...
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Thanks Dan,
 
Dan,
Are you available to put some keys to a slow song I'm working out..... If you like it?
 
I'm really blown away with your stuff.
Craig

Sure. PM me and we can go from there. I'm assuming your projects are tempo-aligned? I work primarily in midi then render the audio when I'm happy with it before I start mixing.  The only instrument I play "live" these days is guitar...
 
Regards,
Dan

Generally, pretty cool! I'd say the drum performance is a highlight, seems to fit the song very well, really supports things.
 
I'd lift the lead vocals up in volume a little in the chorus section.
 
Anything that I can can compare to Boston's first album is pretty friggin' good, and that's what I think of when I hear your stuff. Can't say fairer than that!
 
nice stuff man!
 
-Tom

Another one in the bag...   Love those chugging guitar lines, and the vocals (as before) are freakin' awesome.  This one reminded me a little of 38 Special (flashbacks!) but perhaps with a bit more modern technical proficiency. 
 

Thanks alot Steve,
 
The song is a little short on decorations but I got tired of working on it and decided to through it out there. 
Speaking of 38 Special.....  great songs and terrific melodic lead playing in that band. 
One of my favorites by them which didn't get alot of airplay was "Little Sheba" A completely cool melody and arrangement in that song.  She's a Knockout is actually alot of fun to play on Guitar.
 
Craig

Yup!   I always did like their approach, sort of like southern rock with a melodic pop thing happening.