I love that sound! Guitar,bass, and drums sound slightly out of synk at 10 to around 18 sec and other spots. I think it's well worth a reworking! Add vocals too if you think it needs it. You sing fine and if you don't like it get someone to colab. You can take this invention anywhere from whats laid down. Good song good sound! YEAH Bobby!

kennywtelejazz
I happen to agree with James , your tune has potential and it may certainly be worth a revisit ....
The bass part and the drummer need to get on the same page if you happen too do the song over ...
Other than that , just for you my friend ...it needs more Tele
 
Kenny
 
 

Thanks Kenny, it is chopped full of mistakes no doubt. I've been working on trying not to make those in the future by practicing lately on things I didn't in the past when I made this tune up and recorded it. 
 
LOL! I was the bass player/WANNA BE TRYING and the DRUMMER/trying to find my way at the time using bad midi techniques. LOL, when I recorded this I was just happy to be recording again. 
 
LOL!!!! AND YES!!!!!!! It is in desperate need of a TELE!!!!!! 
My heart cries when listening to this tune thinking of that illusive TELE that should brandish it's sound on the higher plains of the internet while gracing it's way with a somber sound in the twilight of a gracefully bombastic sound. 
 
Hahahahaha, Uh, I was trying to say, that when "All else fails the TELE will tell the sound that time should be telling". Or is it "TELE"'ng?.
 
I've been trying to learn fingerpicking style because it's so much fun, but I guess I need to grab a pick and get back to beating on the strings instead of play with them! Hahahahaahaha
 
Thanks again Kenny, your music and playing are a great inspiration to all my friend!!! 
 
 

bayoubill
I love that sound! Guitar,bass, and drums sound slightly out of synk at 10 to around 18 sec and other spots. I think it's well worth a reworking! Add vocals too if you think it needs it. You sing fine and if you don't like it get someone to colab. You can take this invention anywhere from whats laid down. Good song good sound! YEAH Bobby!

Thanks Bill, I am thinking about re-doing this one. I know I can do better now days. WOW man, I was in such a hurry at the time and had no idea what I was doing, full of a lot of idea's but didn't spend the time to perfect them. I wish I could talk to the old me and go back in time and say : "Hey, you don't just make sound, you have to control how it feels". The old me would probably say........ Well, I'll save what the old me might say for another time. Hahahaha 
I'm just happy to be around and love learning new things these days. I never thought learning could be so fun. 
 
Thanks Bill, and your right, the drums are outa sync, At that time I was just throwing some drum sounds down and making stuff along with them. 
 
Thanks again!!!! 

One more thing. You play the drums and the bass and any other instrument you think it needs. You'll be surprised at what you come up with if you spend the time on it! It also will teach you ,in the process, more about writing songs. Stay with it till you've finished then if it just doesn't work for you bring other players in. 
 
P.S. this advice is coming from someone that writes rock songs in 3/4 

I know this vocalist Tom Gato but he's probably out cat'in around so you might not catch him

Bobby - hi. That's cool. I think this has a ton of potential - this is good - but I think I'd revisit.
 
Nice.

plus ca change - you have great guitar chops and ideas. actually the mix is good too given the (i assume) limitations in drum vst. just needs a vocalist and your staying power/will.

bayoubill
One more thing. You play the drums and the bass and any other instrument you think it needs. You'll be surprised at what you come up with if you spend the time on it! It also will teach you ,in the process, more about writing songs. Stay with it till you've finished then if it just doesn't work for you bring other players in. 
 
P.S. this advice is coming from someone that writes rock songs in 3/4 

Thanks Bill. I am always amazed at your knowledge on music, and you have the music to back it up also. Thank you for taking the time to listen and reply my friend. 

MarkusClinus
Bobby - hi. That's cool. I think this has a ton of potential - this is good - but I think I'd revisit.
 
Nice.

Thanks Mark, I know it needs vocals, and words, I'm no singer and first impression's mean a lot where a songs vocals go, so I thought I'd spare everyone my vocals on this one, for now.
 
Thanks again!!!!
 

mgh
plus ca change - you have great guitar chops and ideas. actually the mix is good too given the (i assume) limitations in drum vst. just needs a vocalist and your staying power/will.

Thanks MGH, I wish I had your skills on playing the guitar it would make things a lot easier on a remake. I'm gonna work on it though. The drums will be the hardest part for me honestly, it's a simple standard 80's chord thing riff. Repeat/Repeat/Lead/Choose your destiny and fade away.... LOL, Yeah the fade was thing is like playing the game Mortal Combat you might say, if someone listens that long then they either like it or they don't where the songwriting goes. 
Thanks again Man! I appreciate you taking time to listen. I think I'm going to re-do this one. Thanks again!