Hi guys,
 
Here's a little tune I just finished. I would love to hear your thoughts. 
 
https://soundcloud.com/joehans/the-kirlian-effect

Hi Joe welcome to the songs forum, mix seems quite reasonable here, whilst I appreciate it is aimed more at the cinematic score, it could do with a little more ear candy as a standalone tune, that whistle off in the back could that come forward a tad?
 
Thanks for sharing.

Hmm.. I guess it could use a little bit sugar on the top. I haven't done much cinematic stuff before so I have to admit I really don't know what I'm doing. The whistle thingy might be tad buried in the background, you are right about that.
 
Thanks for the input. 

Strong into.
 
Wookiee speaks the truth (even though he's hard to understand without a translator , I keed Wookiee and he knows it)
 

bapu
Strong into.
 
Wookiee speaks the truth (even though he's hard to understand without a translator , I keed Wookiee and he knows it)
 

wowa ahc oaoorcrcwooaao cooscwoaoahscwoc aoacahwhrrc wwraahan aooo aorcrawhcanraaowo akrcooakworcanro rawhwa rooohu rrwoao cooscwoaoacahwhrr anahorwo aoacahc.

Hi joe, sounds nice but as Wookie mentioned this could use a bit of melody on top.
 
Rik

Ditto...   the quality is there in both mix and arrangement, the tune just needs a bit more meat. 

Thanks for the constructive critique and kind words. :) So more meat it is.

Hi Joe, as a cinematic piece it stands fine as is imo -- I visualize scenes of a small group of warriors journeying cross country through green alpine uplands and snow-bound passes.  If you want it to stand alone as an instrumental without visuals, then by all means add something.  
 
Nice work in any case, and welcome to the forums! 

stevec
Ditto...   the quality is there in both mix and arrangement, the tune just needs a bit more meat. 

maybe he's a vegan like me.  why do you people always ASSUME these things !  so chauvenistic!