very experimental
 
comments on anything that makes you swoon
 
or puke
 
accepted
 
that's what this is
 
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13376221&q=hi
 
 
 
Jesse Q, Screed

I liked this, but I had a hard time trying to fit it into a paradigm...so you are really original in my book :)
Kind of reminds me a little bit of some 60's rock.  
Congratulations on a successful experiment!
There are some things you might try if you aren't finished with it. I hear other possibilities in it, for example I can hear funk drums and bass in this.

OK, that was like, psychedelic or something....  
 
A little bit jarring with those harsh guitar stabs, but as Tim said it is certainly original.    I also agree with his assessment that it could use a moving bass line to help tie it together... and maybe a drum n' bass drum loop coming in and out...   

Starise
I liked this, but I had a hard time trying to fit it into a paradigm...so you are really original in my book :)

stevec
OK, that was like, psychedelic or something....  
 
A little bit jarring with those harsh guitar stabs, but as Tim said it is certainly original. 

I love you guys.
 
Jesse Q. Screed

Very original sounding which is refreshing. Well done.