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  • One Day Off - New Original Song (ver2)
2016/04/19 23:26:38
jmasno5
Well it's been over a year since I posted a song.  Already!  That went too fast.  The good news for me is I have a backlog.   I hope you enjoy this song.  Let me know it you do or if you don't.  Thanks!  John
https://soundcloud.com/jmasno5/one-day-off
2016/04/20 21:40:56
ABull
Hey John -- this is without a doubt one of the best productions and arrangements I've heard on this forum.  Stunning.  Bravo !!
 
Allan
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2016/04/20 21:56:16
emeraldsoul
I like it too, for the singing, the guitar tones, the mix being pretty clean, just a nice happy song, and I can relate to the concept, except how about 1 week or  . . .
 
Rhythmically, though, your drums are going for a swing feel while the other elements are seeming to play more in a straight four - it can be done, but it's tricky and I hear some spots where I'm not sure it works. I'd say the last half of the song is much tighter and seems to work well.
 
In the first half, you might look at where your bass g and your kick drum are hitting, I think they miss each other on a few downbeats. Or am I hearing problems that aren't there?
 
I really liked the outtro and the big chorusy thing, really cool and very professional sounding.
 
cheers,
-Tom
2016/04/21 09:01:36
dcumpian
Yep, kick is slightly late in spots.
 
Really good song, love the style and the way your instrumentation complements the melody. I'd like to hear a little more "sparkle" in the guitars that play on the downbeat (like The Beatles "Getting Better"). Bass is right there, vocals are all in the pocket, really well-produced track. Great job!
 
Regards,
Dan
2016/04/21 14:03:42
jmasno5
Thank you so much Allan, Tom and Dan!
I appreciate the input, expect it, and depend on it.
I went back in and lined up a couple of things.  I noticed one note of the kick (in a certain pattern) was way off and was repeated about five times or so throughout.  Some were in crucial parts like right before the verses.  How did I miss that?  Not paying attention I guess. 
The new version is the same link.  It's a couple beats longer too.
2016/04/21 14:58:14
J.S.
jmasno5
Well it's been over a year since I posted a song.  Already!  That went too fast.  The good news for me is I have a backlog.   I hope you enjoy this song.  Let me know it you do or if you don't.  Thanks!  John

Cool ! Has a nice jazzy sound to it great for a movie opening song .
Music & vocal sound great !
2016/04/22 08:48:16
jmasno5
Thanks James!  Opening movie $ong would be nice.
2016/04/22 10:42:38
Wookiee
Did not hear the first mix, generally works here thanks for sharing.
2016/04/23 08:19:07
daryl1968
I really like this John. Great performances and I can totally relate to the subject matter.
2016/04/23 14:15:09
ABull
Hey, I had another listen and I'm still struck by how stellar this is.  !!
Allan
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