Jesse, I liked this song the first time you posted it. :)
Here are my comments about the mix and the song itself. I should point out that I don't really know what the hell I'm talking about and my hearing is kind of ragged these days, so take all of this with a big-ass grain of salt, but I offer it in the spirit of really liking what you're doing here.
- Very cool acoustic playing, I really like the chord progression you've got happening here. My ears wanted a bit more clarity in the mix from that guitar, perhaps a bit more sparkle?
- I would like to have heard a more definite beat established much earlier in the song. When the drums become more apparent at the end, the song makes a lot more sense to me musically and then it ends.
- I'd let the bass line play a couple of cycles through the introductory statement, perhaps with a stronger drum coming in during the second repeat to let my ears become better acquainted with Jesse Musicland before the vocals come in and to establish a stronger groove
- Your vocals made me smile because your voice is a lot like mine, kind of high, kind of unusual. This can be a really good thing if you embrace it. There are some places in this song where the vocal is strong and authoritative and articulate and you really sell what's happening. This song would really be something cool if that feeling and clarity and certainty were present in the verse as well.
Keep on it, you've got something unique and I like it!