Hi Folks
Here's a new original song written and performed by me
I hope you enjoy it but nits and crits welcome
 
https://soundcloud.com/skyblueproductions/happy-pursuit-2
 
Happy Pursuit
Written and performed by Staypress
V1
People wait all week for the weekend and all winter for the winter to end
You can wait all your life to be happy or you can choose to live now my friend.
Bridge
It's not about flashy cars
It's not about impressing girls in bars
If you haven't got the message yet I do wish this for you...
Chorus
May your pursuit to be happy be a happy pursuit
Take the time to taste life's fruit
Life should be simple, don't make it complex
You only have one life (until the next)
V2
People believe that life is a struggle - a film with drama in every scene
Life is what you conceive and believe me it's never too late to be what you might have been.
Bridge
Chorus
Middle bit
Bridge
Chorus

Sadly this was one of those songs whose level I will probably not reach. That means I loved it! Well done. Mix wise I think while I listen with my cheap hphones, Sennheiser hd 407s, that the bass is a bit weak but it can be the headphones' fault.

Nice one Daryl! Drums are very present in this, which I love. Bass is right there (not sure why Kakku is missing it, it's right behind my eyes). Nice touches throughout which really keep things interesting.
 
Regards,
Dan

dcumpian
Nice one Daryl! Drums are very present in this, which I love. Bass is right there (not sure why Kakku is missing it, it's right behind my eyes). Nice touches throughout which really keep things interesting.
 
Regards,
Dan

I do hear the bass I just want to hear it like darker or deeper. My tunes most of them miss good bass but I do like the bass, especially if it is powerful and deep. Or maybe I need to switch my headphones to better ones.
Edit: after second listen I must admit the bass is just fine here. Even though it is not quite as deep as I would like, it goes well with the song. And maybe I should get better h-phones.
Edit:I have grados sr80s but not sure of their qualities.

kakku
Sadly this was one of those songs whose level I will probably not reach. That means I loved it! Well done. Mix wise I think while I listen with my cheap hphones, Sennheiser hd 407s, that the bass is a bit weak but it can be the headphones' fault.

Thanks a lot Kakku - nice of you to say. I'll have a listen to the bass

This is very cool – cute without being too cute, poppy but not so sweet that it detracts. Love the way the simple bass line hits you in the gut. Very nice production – solid sounds and blended very well. It’s really an odd little tune as well. Catchy – very. Don’t take this the wrong way – but I can see someone using this in a commercial due to the catchy nature of it. It’s fun, original and just a neat tune all around. Excellent writing and performance.

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daryl1968

kakku
Sadly this was one of those songs whose level I will probably not reach. That means I loved it! Well done. Mix wise I think while I listen with my cheap hphones, Sennheiser hd 407s, that the bass is a bit weak but it can be the headphones' fault.

Thanks a lot Kakku - nice of you to say. I'll have a listen to the bass

Np. My bass judgement is probably wrong. I should probably not say mix things when listening with cheap hphones. I trust Dan is right with his experience and equipment.

Good song Daryl and well done on all the instrumentation/performances. You mixes are very good and I love the amount of clarity you bring out. Personally, I'd like to hear the bass a bit more prominent, but doesn't take anything away from he song. Well done!! Keep up the good work and keep churning them out mate. :)   

dcumpian
Nice one Daryl! Drums are very present in this, which I love. Bass is right there (not sure why Kakku is missing it, it's right behind my eyes). Nice touches throughout which really keep things interesting.
 
Regards,
Dan

Thanks a lot Dan I'm glad you like it