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2017/03/10 15:05:56
Mooch4056
 
 
"Roar!" said the mean lion! "Boo" said the scary ghost. "Woof!" Said the happy dog!
 
 
See?
 
 
Whaddya think? 
2017/03/10 15:11:59
BobF
As he read the carefully crafted prose, he could smell the fresh scent of apple blossoms from the trees the lion, the ghost and the dog were gathered under.
2017/03/10 15:21:32
Mesh
BobF
As he read the carefully crafted prose, he could smell the fresh scent of apple blossoms from the trees the lion, the ghost and the dog were gathered under.


Yeah baby!!
Bow wow wow, yippee yo yippee yay!!
Da Dogfather
2017/03/10 15:44:43
Mooch4056
 
 
I feel a New York best seller is flowing through my veins trying to get out! 
2017/03/10 16:21:10
eph221
BobF
As he read the carefully crafted prose, he could smell the fresh scent of apple blossoms from the trees the lion, the ghost and the dog were gathered under.


*under which the lion, the ghost, and the dog were gathered*  (better)
2017/03/10 17:13:13
jamesg1213
The drums beat steadily all last night but have ceased since sunrise this morning.

Privates Dunnow and Fink found the strain unbearable and showed up for sentry duty as an accordion-playing pantomime horse on a unicycle - although to their credit, still in uniform.

Alphonse brightened up the men briefly by throwing together a delightful, impromptu little breakfast of kedgeree and wild trout followed by fresh strawberries and some delightful little crepes. The men have had a whip round and bought him Fewster's "History of Military Chef's and the Great Campaigns of Wellington Before He knew anything".

I have sent 2nd Platoon out on a recce but fear the worst since for the past half-hour several empty beer cans have been flung into our lines wrapped in the men's underpants and accompanied by coarse jeering and colourful taunts.

Vicar Wilt has relinquished his kilt in favour of something from C&A and patrols the parapet with his portable gramophone playing requests to keep up the men's spirits. A popular title seems to be "Why Don't You F off You Silly Sod", but the good Vicar doesn't seem to have that one in his collection. However, the effects upon the men's morale of repeat playings of "Songs of the Male Sallowflench recorded in the Great Threshing Barn at Titmost-Under-The-Bule" are there for all to see.

I have sent Lance-Corporal Wittering on a near suicide mission to the "Blindfold and Compass" for crisps and shandy. Meanwhile Sergeant Roundnethers is bellowing nicely from the redoubt.

I ordered the men to fix bayonets, but they said they said there was no need because they weren’t broken.
2017/03/10 17:30:37
sharke
Oh I am a little robin red-breast, with me wings a-flappin' in the breeze
Climb aboard me back me hearties, and I'll fly yers up into the trees
We'll have a picnic with the squirrels, but you'll have to balance on a leaf
'Cause there's not much room left on the branches, and there's alligators underneath
 
(c) Me, some doctor's waiting room about 6 years ago
2017/03/10 17:39:05
Mooch4056
 
 
Oh Ok. I see now I have all kinds of competition for my new novel. "How Now Brown Cow" 
 
 
Typical 
2017/03/10 17:54:17
Mesh
Mooch4056
 
 
"How Now Brown Cow" 
 
 
Typical 


Monkey see monkey do
Forum monkeys gonna throw poo on ewe
 
 
2017/03/10 17:56:48
BobF
eph221
BobF
As he read the carefully crafted prose, he could smell the fresh scent of apple blossoms from the trees the lion, the ghost and the dog were gathered under.


*under which the lion, the ghost, and the dog were gathered*  (better)




Could be, depending on how the narrator is being presented to the reader.  My version is intended to give the reader the impression that the narrator is a repressed, straight dude. 
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