Hey Dan, condolences on your father's passing -- I know how that feels.
Overall, a very good listen and a good feel to your piece. There is a sustained low note to the right of center that comes in at the one minute mark and took *me* out of the moment. Why? Because that sound and the subsequent chordings sounded like a DX7 or another vintage synth. To me (for what that's worth) it didn't fit in with the wonderful sounds you otherwise have. Your mix was fantastic and everything was very listenable. When the drums kicked in, I did think for a second or two that I was hearing a Simple Minds backing track -- which is not a bad thing at all. Good work :)