When I started writing for my wife, I explored every possible genre. Slow Blues-ish included. This was one of those early song ideas I kept jamming to. I thought the solo was a total rip off of two of my heroes. But apparently, I failed because that's not what people heard when they heard the demo. Not that I don't see what they mean, but the names that come up usually aren't the ones I thought I was stealing from...
 
If YOU had to name two major influences... Who was I trying to imitate?
 

 
 

Ace Frehley and David Gilmour? Sounded Gilmour-ish in the 2nd half, and we know you're a Kiss fan...

Hi,
 
Again, and I posted in another thread about this, what you "think", and "see" is an invisible idea that few will be able to pick up and recognize. Expecting anyone to find these is probably something that would be a bit too freaky for most people.
 
As I have suggested to you before, you create, play and write for you and your wife. Stop worrying or thinking about the other end, until you are done putting it together, or it will never happen. The guitar bends and stretches would fit very nice with some body gymnastics, for my vision, for example, and you might want to consider that some more.
 
Creativity can be tough, and sometimes it might sound like ... or write like ... or paint like ... ALMOST ALWAYS because the tools are the same ... RARELY EVER because it is true. 
 
BTW, the piece you posted WAS VERY NICE, and I only heard RAIN and wanted to hear more ... I'm just glad I did not compare or was interested in anyone else at that moment. I might have a suggestion or two, but they are private and not for public intoxication!

jamesg1213
Ace Frehley and David Gilmour? Sounded Gilmour-ish in the 2nd half, and we know you're a Kiss fan...

Believe it or not, you're the first person to mention Gilmour - and that was spot on! 

I'm awfully glad to see Ace Frehley's name as he is a huge influence -  the guitar player I was thinking about is one of his influences I believe...

Rain

jamesg1213
Ace Frehley and David Gilmour? Sounded Gilmour-ish in the 2nd half, and we know you're a Kiss fan...

Believe it or not, you're the first person to mention Gilmour - and that was spot on! 

I'm awfully glad to see Ace Frehley's name as he is a huge influence -  the guitar player I was thinking about is one of his influences I believe...

0:37-0:40 is pure Gilmour Nice tone btw!

Rain
If YOU had to name two major influences... Who was I trying to imitate?
 

Jeff Beck
David Gilmour

I'm getting Beck/Gilmour vibes as well, which is great!

I'm not hearing Jeff Beck. The melodic nature makes it very much like something Gilmour would do. There's a lot of players to choose from for style matching. Don Felder also fits as does Joe Walsh.

The funny thing is that the only Jeff Beck song I've ever listened to was a cover of Stevie Wonder's Superstitious. I KNOW he is an amazing guitarist, but I just never took the time..
 
Likewise, I remember recording my part on a record and being told that it sounded like Steve Morse. To this day, I've never heard him.
 
I'm a serious failure - I was trying to channel a Jimmy Page kind of thing..

Well there's your problem. You play way too clean to sound like Page. Make some mistakes, slur a few chords and let your guitar hang about 6 inches lower. Let me know know that works. :)