OK I agree with Daryl1968, don't change a thing.
 
 
but as much as I like your voice/vibe/style, I don't think this style of song (kind of "R n B porn groove") really suits your voice as well as some of your other songs. Or maybe, the voice doesnt suit the song as well as it does on your others.
 
But still, don't change, you are too cool. Fred Frith meets David Bowie?
 
cheers,
-Tom

hello, I was away, I was surprised to see some comments.
 
Thanks for that.
 
eSoul, sorry that the vibe conjured porn.  I certainly did not intend that, and after another listen you might not mean that either.  Some dude said it was slinky, and that would throw anyone off.
 
If you knew my girlfriend, you would want to be with her too.  I did not mean it to seem that we were bumpin'.
 
It's only a love song to me.
 
She is the only thing that is real to me, and when I get the chance to hold her I feel real too.
 
Jesse
 
 
 
 

Real nice going! All was already said I was going to say. Keep up the good work!

uh, <awkward now!> I'm sorry too, upon further reflection. It's your meter and bass line and such that suggested the genre-that-shall-not-be-named . . . not the subject, your girlfriend.  Just commenting on the song as a piece of art, which it definitely is - not the subject of it.
 
Very glad that you've got the love bug, it makes the world go 'round!
 
When you create a piece of art, and send it out into the world (or even this forum!) then it's time for people to bring their interpretations and reactions to it. And how they react says as much about them as it does your art.
 
ahem . . . 
 
 
cheers,
-Tom

Mr. eSoul, you are a class act.
 
A lot of people would have doubled down, but you took the higher path and explained yourself perfectly.
 
I did not find your initial comment hurtful.  I just wanted to clarify for others what my intentions were. 
 
With that said, I also understand the concept of unintended consequences, so the perception may have seemed what you alluded too, and for that I can make no excuse. 
 
You Mr. eSoul, are an example of who I would like to be more like.  Someone who can step back, look themselves in the mirror, and further explain who they are at the deepest level.
 
Blessed are the peacemakers....to me, that is what you are.
 
Jesse Q. Screed