I like this! You have talent and its clear. Keep doing what you do man.

Lol! I followed you on Soundcloud...by the way.

Kerry, thanks for listening, thanks for following.
 
Tweaked another version for those who want another listen
 
https://soundcloud.com/cian-mcgovern/lfy-07nov/s-BMObc
 
Cian

revised link doesn't work so I listened to the first link.  super nice vocal work and vocal harmonies.  In a major studio they would do some vocal pitch tuning, I don't know if you did or not, but sounds like you did not.  Vocal harmony sound in the chorus is really great.  The mix is very good, and the vibe is felt strong.  A major studio would give the parts more punch somehow, which is probably not possible in Sonar, I can't explain how.  Song deserves major studio production, it's that good.  nice one

Thanks Mike, I think it is a strong song and your right there is another 10% to be got out of this by making it punch and clearer and you could definitely get close with sonar, Im not quite there yet. The studios have better compressors and effects and most of all analog gear which adds a sparkle and glue that I reckon digital can never really emulate.
 
Cian

Great job on this one Cian. I think the higher vocal gives this one the sound that is probably cutting edge compared to others similar in the genre or close IMHO. I don't know , they say white boys can't jump but I believe you can. This has that distinctive R&B feel to it...it has that vibe that a lot of people like to hear!!

I always find myself liking your songs about 1/3 or 1/4 they way in...this time it was when the drums came in, you got me there and held me close till the end...GREAT JOB! -Shawn Lee Farrell

I love the tune. Wonderful vocal melody and delivery.

This is really a beautiful number Cian.  You have done a great job on this.  The instrumentation and especially the vocals are very well done.  The only nit-pick that I would have is the percussion.  To my unprofessional ears, they sound a bit synth or mechanical.  What were you using for the drums?  Drums have been one of my major nemesis in putting together my stuff.  However, that is a small point given the overall good sound of the song.
 
Nice one!

Guys,
 
Tim, how are you? Yes the most memorable thing after the end of this song is the high vocal. Maybe if they never see my face they might think that I aint white!
 
Shawn, thats the kinda feedback I want. good to hear. I usually do start my songs off minimilistic which can often bore the listener pretty quickly.
 
Ohgrant, many thanks.
 
Freddie. Well to put it straight the percussion is mechanical and this genre typically has that. however maybe it is too mechanical. Its a question I would like others answer too, I mean I dont want to do a drum loop cos I want each percussion hit to fit how I want it and assuming any other top end producer would make custom beats to songs how to they do it without it sounding mechanical? other inputs
 
Cian
 
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