Folks,
 
Relapse, a song written around the "flaw" of many mortals, the kink in the chain, wether thats addiction or emotional disaster. Its an electronic diachotomy in that its has laid back floating electronic parts and in your face aggressive electronic sections. Its about 90% done, few tweaks and barely mixed but
 
Does it flow?
When do you get bored?
What bothered you?
What would you do different?
Is is s good as other song of mine that you have heard?
 
https://soundcloud.com/ci.../relapse-draft/s-UsP1Q
 
UPDATED VERSION:
https://soundcloud.com/ci...relapse-30sept/s-wJS2J
 
Thanks,
 
Cian

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good as other song of mine that you have heard?

 
Hi Cian,
 
Yeah... I mean, it is different, for sure, but your vocals are, yet again, sound as a pound (or euro). Accompanying music fits well, in my opinion.
 
At 90% complete, I'm sure there are still things you yourself want to improve.
 
Flow? Get bored? Bothered me?
 
Don't know about flow, exactly. It seemed okay to me.
 
The song is too short to get bored of. I mean... Have you tried to listen to one of my ten plus minute ambient shabookas (made up word)? I'll give you bored
 
 
 

I'm no songsmith so will let others feedback on that. From an instrument point of view the minimal arrangement works very well, everything has it's own space in the mix. The use of sfx fit in really well and as for getting bored, not here I enjoyed the listen.
 
If anything I may have put a touch of reverb on that very last gunshot, but that's my own taste.

it's got some great some parts, especially from 3.10 min onwards it's fantastic....the drama is great imo.
perhaps a 'heavy dance/R&B bass and drums type' would spice up the stuff before.
just a little of mouth noise, a little further from the mic would fix that probably.
 
talk or sing, no need to 'set your throat' just sing from your lungs (and heart ofcourse).
your pure voice is great, and the louder / full throttle parts are killer, will get people to listen again and again.
let me know if I need to shut up, just say thanks...no worries + good luck
 

The sound stage is well set.  Mix is good and vocals too. Lyrics are engaging.
 
It sounds like it's around 100bpm.  Did you consider a faster tempo?  If you are looking for a perspective change and if it's not too much trouble, you might consider having a listen to the music at around 120bpm.  Even if you decide that the current tempo is what you prefer, hearing it faster may spark some ideas.
 
much enjoyed!

I liked the song and the lyrics seemed meaningful to me. The time/feel change in the end was interesting. It might be useful to do that in the middle of the song and then back to the beat as it were. 
 
You have a lot of different elements in the song and the transitions are nice. It kept me entertained till the end even though its not my typical listening style choice.
 
I like you vocal style also and it worked well with this.
 
I would change the sound of the snare and maybe the kick as well.
 
Good job.

nice tune, sad subject, very well mixed indeed. I think it's the subject matter that keeps me at arms length, not your arrangement, parts, vocals - all of those are excellent. Really quite well done!
 
I could see you popping up the gain or automate the volume a spike on the "lapse" part of "relapse" - as it is, if I didn't know the title I might have assumed it was "relax" which is a dramatically different interpretation than what  I think you are going for here.    :)
 
your stuff is always a pleasure to listen to.
 
cheers,
-Tom
 
 

RELAPSE IS A PART OF RECOVERY...GREAT JOB! -SLF
 

I liked the second half very much... :) -S

Hi folks,
 
Thanks for all your feedback. I went back and had another pot at this.
 
Seems that the second half of the song interested people so I decided to place that in the middle.
 
I have included  many other modications including bass, sound effects, percussion samples etc
 
Im still keen/cian ;-) for feedback in a sense of impact of the track, coherency and what elements of the song are/should be to the fore.
 
Updated mix:
https://soundcloud.com/cian-mcgovern/relapse-30sept/s-wJS2J
 
Cian