emeraldsoul
I just love your songwriting style, especially the vocals. I can hear a little high-up octave harmony with maybe a melodyne treatment to it? Mixed in really softly? pretty cool stuff! what are you doing up there? Is that Mrs Daryl?
 
I'd agree with the pizzicato strings coming down just a hair.
 
cheers, and write more songs please.
-Tom
 
 

Thanks a lot Tom - I really appreciate it.
The high harmony is me but the current Mrs Daryl1968 was helping me get to the high notes by using a pair of pliers on my private parts - I find it helps. 

daryl1968
...The high harmony is me but the current Mrs Daryl1968 was helping me get to the high notes by using a pair of pliers on my private parts - I find it helps. 

Good technique, thanks for sharing. 
 

ohgrant
Awesome tune. Pro sounding production. I really enjoyed the mix of Hi and lo fi sounds.

Thanks Grant - very kind of you.

Very cool stuff Daryl. One of your best I reckon, top notch mate.

bapu

markno999
 Also, the Pizzi strings in the intro are a bit loud. 
 

^^ this ^^

^^bollocks^^ :)

Great tune and an interesting topic. Made me wonder if you were referring to fluoride and
mind control. Or perhaps someone really did slip you a micky.
 
The production was very good and cheerful. I think Acid Polka is just the right style.
 

I like your song and the production is slick. There are plenty of suggestions here for tweaking the mix, but you've done a fine job with it already. Tweaking might make it "better," or worse. Who knows? I'd mark it finished.
 
If your Soundcloud tags give a clue to the meaning of this song, you might not know that water fluoridation was a big hoo ha in this country in the 1950s and 60s. Many right wingers thought it was a communist conspiracy and fought mightily in the press and water district board meetings throughout the land to stop it. I think it is a nearly universal practice now, which may be why there's a segment of our society which seems to be crazy.

Hi, Daryl,
 
Very catchy and cool modern pop song with great songwriting, clever lyrics, well played instrumentation and excellent vocals!
 
You've also got a fresh sounding, radio-ready mix that sounds fantastic.
 
Dynamite production, Daryl, great work!
 
Best Wishes,
Bob

Mesh
As always, very good stuff Daryl. Very catchy song and production is top notch. As others have said, the hi-hat's the only thing that needs a little lowering......other than that, Bravo!!

Thanks mate - really appreciate it bro from a different mo. Yes, going to look at the mix when I get time.

See what happens when you get a good reputation of doing great work........even us amateurs will start looking for problems (that may or may not be even there).....take it with a pinch of salt.