Hi all,
 
There is a songwriting competition coming up which requires a song to be written along the lines of "peace"...vaguely
 
I have to post this on Friday and I am getting a girl to help me sing the choruses which you will hear at the moment I strain to reach!
 
Please offer crits or obvious flaws, no major surgery as I only got 2 days,
 
 
DUET VERSION FINAL
https://soundcloud.com/ci...t-amanda-kehoe/s-vxbWP
 
Thanks,
 
Cian

Cian,
 
Nice production.   The only thing I might do is pull back the reverb levels a bit, that is a personal taste thing, but I feel like it is a hair verb heavy.    Will sound good with a female singer blending in on the choruses.    Good song.
 
Regards

just the word 'competition' puts me right off.
 

 
that said,
the mix is a bit too 'wide' for me...
the voices need some presence on them to get them to 'pop' a bit more...
 
focus on your lowest lows,
it feels 'light', for lack of a better word.
 
 
cool tune cian
 

Thanks men,
 
I will be doing another mix tomorrow evening when I have female parts.
 
Yes, I know "competition" usually means compromising creativity.
 
I could boost the presence end of vocals but think the culprit is just as much the instrumentation behind them
 
Thanks,
 
Cian
 
 

I will be doing another mix tomorrow evening when I have female parts.
 
Um, arg, hmmm, biting my tongue...
 
But seriously - cool tune. Listening on crappy speakers but vocal seems a bit loud and I want to hear more of the various guitar parts and keyboard bits. That's a personal preference though - I like those little bits...

I loved it.  The female vocal will definitely add some dimension but Im not sure what I would change.  I think its snappy and original.

Hiya Cian,
 
Sounds exactly what I have come to expect from you Cian . Nice song
 
I'll let the experts comment on the mix... Not my area, as you know...
 
I'll listen again when you have incorporated the "female parts"
 
And good luck with the competition
 
 
cheers
 
andy

I think the addition of higher vocals could be a good call, anything that adds vocal interest is a good thing by me. I can't really hear anything that seriously needs changing Cian, it's a great song and anything I can think of is just personal preference, not really fixing anything that doesn't sound good.
If I could change anything it would be the abrupt ending, but that might be a major change, and you said you didn't want to go there. That could also just be personal preference soooo, all I really have to say is "Good luck".

maybe your female guest singer could take over parts you're saying 'one step, one step closer, one step closer we are'.
maybe start to sing the verses real calme and then build up to the chorus.
you just work too hard :)
think the key-parts/things could be a bit easier or more to the background.
not sure what it is, but the music is a hair uptight all together, or perhaps taking it down just a fraction on the tempo/bpm could make it better.
 
your vocals and melodies are really fantastic, again.
don't worry if you should not winn this one, you'll get there surely one day....your voice is no less than Paul Carracks'..
 
 
 

Will keep out a furry ear for the remix Cian, agree the vox is a little to much reverb.