Would appreciate some constructive feedback on this one, I wrote this while trying to do something else which seems to be the case for me most times, hope its up to standard for you guys n girls
https://soundcloud.com/9thaspect/the-journey

Hi Stephen,
 
Welcome to the Songs forum 
 
I have listened to The Journey. You have great talent with this art, for sure. I am not that great at offering help on mix and stuff, but listening a second time, there are places where the kick drum is buried in the mix. But that may, in part, be down to me listening on my KNS 8400 'phones.
 
I'll be listening to a few more of your tunes before I tuck into my Bran Flakes...
 
cheers
 
andy

Hi Andy thanks for the reply

Its only the last few songs I have done that are getting anywhere listenable, I am learning at this recording lark. The drums are just a simple midi drum loop so I didn't know how to mess with each drum individually, they are slapped in the mix as they come. I have no means of recording drums as I am in tiny bedroom, one day you never know.
 
You are just down the lane from me I am near Leigh

hi again Stephen,
 
The drums sound okay to me. Yes, real drums would be great, but for some of us it's just impossible (lack of skills/lack of facilities/whatever ). If it was me, I'd try to embellish the MIDI loop and make it mine. A bit time consuming, but worth the effort...
 

9thaspect
You are just down the lane from me I am near Leigh

Indeed 
 

I did chop it and fiddle about a bit with the drum loop

Extremely decent song! My first thought on your mix was, vocals up please!
 
I was listening on headphones so I noticed (I think) the hard panned acoustic guitars (2 separate lines of them) - it probably works on speakers a treat, but it really distracted me as a headphone listener. Good luck working that one out! :)
 
Sweet little background vocal "aaaaahhhh" by the way!
 
Nice vocals, and your voice is pleasantly reminiscent of Harry Chapin, which is nice territory in my opinion. Just reminiscent, you have your own thing going on.
 
welcome to the forum, and nice job!
 
cheers,
-Tom

emeraldsoul
Extremely decent song! My first thought on your mix was, vocals up please!
 
I was listening on headphones so I noticed (I think) the hard panned acoustic guitars (2 separate lines of them) - it probably works on speakers a treat, but it really distracted me as a headphone listener. Good luck working that one out! :)
 
Sweet little background vocal "aaaaahhhh" by the way!
 
Nice vocals, and your voice is pleasantly reminiscent of Harry Chapin, which is nice territory in my opinion. Just reminiscent, you have your own thing going on.
 
welcome to the forum, and nice job!
 
cheers,
-Tom

Cheers Tom for the feedback,

You are right about the hard panned guitars and it does work on speakers I think? will have a think about that one next time. Will check out who Harry Chapin is and thanks for the positivity on the vocal, I am only just finding my voice, not had the guts to attempt to sing before much, played bass for years but started playing acoustic and singing just so I can put my own ideas down, without waiting for others to come and help me out.

Cheers,
Steve

Very nice!

ESoul was right.  I do hear the Chapin similarity, though as he said, different.  WELCOME to the forum.  I haven't been up for awhile and am freeing up time to listen to more tunes.  This is nice. A bit long for my attention span. Good song and I like the acoustic sound. I look forward to more posts from you.

Hello and welcome to the songs forum it seems work reasonably well here, not 100% on the hard panning in the beginning.  Thanks for sharing.