Nice, very nice.
Rik

Vox level is fine here, but when the singing starts, just bring your banjax down a hair. Did you pan your main vocal slightly to the right? You might keep it dead center and pan the banjax.
 
Like the electric guitar when it comes in!!!
 
For me also, some snappy percussion should really be brought in as well. That would kill. And a bass lick, the standard A -E - A -E just dropping a fourth. G -D-G-D.     It would drive it.
 
Your vocals are very evocative - really nice job on this!
 
-Tom
 
 

ohgrant
Simply brilliant, love it

 
Thank you kindly Grant!

Wookiee
Lovely open yet intimate, nice one guys you have a very listenable voice Tim with some cool picking, good mix and guitar James.  Excellent job all round.

 
Thanks very much John!

Excellent, James!  Your voice shines in this.  It seems like everything you touch turns to gold.

Great songwriting and the lyrics are very impressive and poetic.
 
The only crit like the rest was that arpeggioed guitar throughout masked the vocal a bit, too zingy, bring up the leadvox a hair or send or deaden that riff a little.
 
3:37 possibly could of had drums to the end
 
Cian

markno999
James,
 
Great production.   I see you are still working with Peter Gabriel;)  He really sounds like him IMHO...  You could push the LVOX up a hair but overall superbly produced.   I really like the introduction of the guitar around 2:10, that is a nice texture.   Was almost expecting an In The Air Tonight moment with drums kicking in at the end...the guitar tease built that anticipation I guess...   Really awesome production.
 
Regards

 
Very nice compliments Mark, thanks so much!

bapu
Turn up the vox mayte.

Will do. Or banjax down a hair.

Rikkie
Nice, very nice.
Rik

 
Thanks Rik!

emeraldsoul
Vox level is fine here, but when the singing starts, just bring your banjax down a hair.

That's the answer I think.
 

Did you pan your main vocal slightly to the right? You might keep it dead center and pan the banjax.

 
No, vocal is dead centre, banjax is 27% left.
 

Like the electric guitar when it comes in!!!

 
Thanks!
 

For me also, some snappy percussion should really be brought in as well. That would kill. And a bass lick, the standard A -E - A -E just dropping a fourth. G -D-G-D.     It would drive it.

 
Maybe, but that would be a different song. Trying to keep this as near as we can to the two of us playing the song, no 'pretend band'.
 

Your vocals are very evocative - really nice job on this!

 
Tim's the singer, and I agree
 
 
Thanks Tom!