I am too new at this to say something technical. The song does what I like, it creates imagery in my head. It also forms a connection with someone I never met.
 
Good stuff
 
Cheers,
 
Billy

Nice tune Tim but it does not quite create the image I have from the title, for me it has a too enclosed sound, I would expect an airy sound with space to breath.
 
Good start and knowing how hard you work on your music I think this has the potential to be one of your master pieces.
 
Thanks for sharing.

Hi Tim...catching up with some listening today...so far this sounds like more my type of music.  As I just said to Walt in a critique of his latest tune there is too much energy in the low-mid's and I think you've mastered this too loud.  IMO go back to the mix and work on the gain stage...this way you can get those instruments loud and big but then lower the gain stage on the master buss...this seems to allow you have a soft mix but it's still loud and big...if that makes any sense.  Also check your pan law...for this sort of track I would want -3db pan law...it doesn't really matter which one...use your ear's...but what this does is stop the track from bunching up in the middle...if you want a boxy sound...one that isn't highly stereo...then it's fine to leave the pan law at zero but for something that needs air...IMO you don't want that...try tuning the top end some more too...I'm not sure what EQ your using on the master but the Pro Channel set to Pure is the way to go...and make sure in between stages to use the liner phase EQ and search for the formant of the track...you will hear it...this is where the track all of a sudden opens up...I've know about this stuff for some time but I've only just recently employed it in mastering (you should really be doing it across the mix) and I'm blown away by how much of a difference it makes...one day I will sit down and do some proper tutorial vids.  I've really been putting in some lone hours (ADHD medication :)) and I've finally managed to get all the little bits of theory that I've known and put it into practice.
 
Ben   

 Awesome tune Tim, I really enjoyed. You must have a museum filled with rare stringed instruments. 

That's nice Tim. I felt the acoustic guitar got a bit lost/buried as the piece developed, likewise the bodhran. Bass is cool. Good Clannad vibe to this.

Tim- what a journey. love the ukulele tuned in 5ths 
reminds me of REM's Green album, which is one of my favs of theirs!
loved this bro- 
 
- Daren 

You have recently developed an instrumentation that totally just works as a group. Very Jethro Tull jammish goodness.  
 
On this one, I'd eq a little top away from that bass guitar, just a little.
 
nice one!
-Tom

at first i thought some timing issues but now just think you're pushing the beat a little? anyway, love how this builds up, good change of instrumentation to keep the dynamics altering. good mix too!

This sounds so good Tim! The instrumentation is very well done, and the bass meanders, but it isn't bad at all. What this really needs is a singer, female, light and airy.
 
Great job!
 
Regards,
Dan

Hi guys I really appreciate the great feedback I've gotten on this track! I'll respond individually...
 
Rik- Many thanks to you sir! I hope this finds you feeling better!
 
synkrotron- Coming from a synth guy I really appreciate your take on it! 
 
Mark- Glad to see you back again Mark long time no see! Thank you for your advice!
 
Billy- Welcome to the song area! Nice to meet you! ...and thanks for listening and commenting on this track!
 
Wookie- I appreciate you honesty here...I'll go back and re evaluate this!
 
Ben- When I listen to your mixes I usually hear a great mix...so I'm listening...I did pan the parts. I'm not even sure which panning law I used. I do usually try and use panning to my advantage.Maybe I need to look at it more in depth this time and try to hear what you are hearing.
On my last track I heard that it was too loud by one listener out of like 20 comments....but people are accustomed to listen louder, so he may have been onto something, and the genre should be taken into consideration I think. When I compare my track to other similar tracks in my genre, I had found the volume to be too soft and so I did take some measures to make it louder and to my ears it still doesn't quite measure up to pro mastered material, but I don't doubt you Ben...so PLEASE if anyone else is hearing this please tell me so I can look more at my staging...on my system it seems to be ok with my volume set to 50%...maybe even a bit low. I am loud using K-14 but I fall into a comfortable range at the typical db scale. Thanks for your detailed comments Ben!
 
ohgrant- Thanks man! Well I have a small room filled with stringed instruments...and I am planning to add at least a few more...old world maybe but not really old :)
 
James- Thanks for your comments.Unforunately until I can get a little better preamp setup my guitar doesn't really capture the way I'd like it to. It seems to work for me sometimes in that guitars can be too much especially in the high mids...the flip side is a guitar track that lacks a lot of mojo...and my bodhran is only 12"...I'm going to be getting a big one soon.
 
Daren- Thanks man! If your interested there's a guy stringing ukes up in GDAD. He uses two nylon and two steel strings.. The steel strings are the low strings and the nylon are the higher ones. They are heck to keep in tune though.As an addition to other stringed parts i think it works great.
 
Tom- Thanks! I'm glad you think my current setup is working ok...I had wondered about the bass since I can hear some string noise. This is probably what you're referring to.
 
mgh- Thank you!
 
Dan- Thanks Dan good to hear from you!...a female..light and airy you say? I'm not sure how much I should devulge here...I thought I had a female vocalist..she agreed to work on future things with me and then she simply disappeared. I sent an idea, she said she would get back to me and ....nothing in over a month. I'm a little disappointed. I think she wanted to work on her own material...putz around with reason and get kudos by herself ..I don't really know because  she dropped off the radar which I think was more than a little immature ( especially for a 40 year old). I had my hopes up but she was pretty good at sticking a hole in my balloon.....I'm starting to get really tired of attempting to work with women...sorry but that's just how I feel right now. I seen a real potential to combine our abilities...but well...screw it....so I guess maybe you can tell I'm a little bitter. I have shevannai and that works ok for some things, but I'm really trying to be more independent in my creations because it seems I have to be.