Thanks everyone for taking the time to listen. I appreciate this.
@ Tom: Regarding the reverb, I was exercising restraint! I tend to be a bit heavy handed when it comes to reverb.
I would agree that the song is screaming out for more instrumentation. Unfortunately, I am being conservative with my time at the moment. I have two more songs to record and finding the time to do even this has been a bit of a challenge. However, if time allows I may take a stab at putting down some strings and ask a buddy of mine to allow me to record him playing drums. What I would really like to hear on the song is a real Cello part. Anyone here play Cello? If memory serves correctly I believe Paul plays Cello. I haven't been here in a while and I don't even know if Paul even frequents this place anymore.
@ Starise: I agree, more instrumentation. Maybe I will find some time!
@ Philz: To Annelle's credit, she have never really recorded herself outside of maybe a recording done with a cell phone and a video here and there. Like me, she is learning how and what to listen for. We did two vocal takes. The first of which was very pitchy. After some discussion we did the second take and the pitch issues were far better however, she was holding back on her delivery. I actually liked the song starting on the more emotional/broken delivery. Yet, I agree it needed a more "in your face" delivery throughout the remainder of the song.
In short, I have done a total remix. I went back and used the 1st take (Yes, unfortunately this means pitch correction) and adjusted the reverb. The link to this mix is below.
Thanks again everyone.
Richard
http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=13132374&q=hi&newref=1