Hi,
 
Snare chops in the 'Verse', imo, ease off a bit, let it flow.  Drums fills i.e. toms/snare is fine. For the most part the drums are very nicely done.  
 
Drums, vocals and harmonies are always quite challenging for me.
 
BTW, I love your vocals and harmonies, very slick/professional.
 
 

Wow, what an undertaking, and I must say you did a superb job with it.  I loved the vocal harmonies.

Thanks guys!!
 
I have to tell the truth here - this was our third attempt to get the vocals sitting right.
 
The first one I ended up hating the melody line - it just wasn't right for the song.
The second one was even worse as I had a go at singing it myself. Big mistake! No amount of V-Vocal or Melodyne could disguise what was obviously someone with zero vocal skills.
 
Greg - I hear what you're saying and will have a look at that. 
 

Bristol_Jonesey
Hey Greg - thanks for listening and glad you enjoyed it.
 
Which aspect of the drums do you think need possibly re-visiting? Beats/rhythms? Choice of kit pieces?
 
The drums have not yet been frozen so I can easily take on board some fresh ideas

Very nice, i love it!

I've made a few changes and put it on Soundcloud as an mp3.
 
I'd be grateful for any comments

An epic song.  It sounds really good here.  I got a classic Genesis vibe with the sustaining guitars very nicely done.  I don't think anything was out of balance.  Great job on such a huge undertaking. 

Thank you John, glad you liked it!

Love the mix and the balance.  I think that 1:45 worth of intro is a bit too much, but that is an artistic thing that only you can judge.
 
Glen

Thanks for listening Glen.
 
I have just finished yet another version which includes an additional guitar line over the original backing during the intro, just to give it more interest.
It's not uploaded yet but hopefully I'll get around to it today.

Nice mix, very clear and open overall! The vocals were great too and I really like the intro. 
Instrumentally reminds me of ELO... vocally reminds me of the Beatles (I'm sorry, most singers with an accent make me think Beatles :S) The bridge around 3:30 killer as well! Love the changes... really good tune!