Interesting lyrics and kind of a Southern Rock flavor...a good start! I think the mix needs some help as well as a little tweaking of one or 2 of the guitar voices. (maybe turn down the distortion just a bit for this tune??)
I like the basic melody and chord changes. Maybe try to "smooth out" your vocals a bit?? Just my humble 2 cents worth here. :-)
Thanks for sharing and keep at it!