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  • another tune. feedback and suggestions appreciated!
2015/03/03 20:55:26
ward s
I think I need to learn to use my microphone better. It's a reasonably decent mic (shure ksm27) and sometimes I think I got it right, but I still get a lot of mouth noises (clicks and pops), hissing S's and F's, stuff like that. And I can't tell you how many times the dog started barking or the furnace kicked in halfway through a take. The dog is sweet, but she can't sing for crap.
 
Anyway, on to the opera...
 
https://soundcloud.com/wardcheese/gone-insane-1
2015/03/04 08:01:12
Wookiee
Interesting song, for me there a few things that stand out in the mix.  The vocal is a bit to low, nice bass tone but a little to present and the drums sound thin and distant.  Which leads me to think that a few tweaks in the mix will turn this into an even more interesting and engaging song.
 
Thanks for sharing. 
2015/03/05 02:56:18
RussjWhite
For loads of vox tips and mixing tips do this free course https://www.edx.org/course/vocal-recording-technology-berkleex-bmpr365x-0#.VPgLePzkfYg
Sonar does have a de esser built i, have a look into this vocal strip. 
Really enjoyed this track, quite beautiful.
 
 
Gus
 
2015/03/05 09:59:50
evadianepug
Well, I'm leaning two ways on this.  I agree with Gus and Wookie.  I think it's a really good song.  The dark lyrics in a couple spots seem to bring the mood down. That probably works for you cause you wrote it and it means something in your life.  Hard to explain.  My suggestion would be (though no one asked) would be to maybe replace the suicide sections with a bit more hope.  I usually don't suggest things like this but I like the song quite a bit but was pulled down  as I read the lyrics while listening.  Anyway, just a couple thoughts.
2015/03/05 17:01:22
ward s
Wookie, thanks for the thoughts regarding mix. That's exactly what I need. I get lost in the tweaking and lose all my objectivity.
 
Gus, awesome link! I'm there! And thanks for the kind words. I'm glad you dug it.
 
Warren, actually I did ask for your suggestion, and thanks for putting it out there. It is true, this song is pretty dark, and many of my songs tend to move in that direction. You're also correct that a song like this works for me because it has its roots in my life. This may not be my current, daily reality, but it is a place I have visited. Song writing and poetry for me are kind of a combination of method acting and psychotherapy. Like method acting, I need to pull real emotions out of my own life and invest them in whatever song I am working on. Like psychotherapy, I am driven to write songs because I have to get s**t off my chest. (Who goes to see a therapist because they're happy all the time?) If you need a tall, cool glass of hope after you listen to one of my songs, I can at least offer you this: After all these years, I am still writing and have not yet taken my seat on the ground on top of the hill, leaning back against a tree...
 
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2015/03/05 20:37:32
Freddy J
I like how you did the vocals on this number --- a bit of a Dylan feel.  This is a different song but it is different good.
BTW  www.digitalfishphones.com put out a free VST de-esser called Spitfish.  It is easy to use and does an adequate job.
Nice job on this number.
2015/03/05 21:23:16
ward s
Thank you Freddy. Really appreciate the encouragement.
 
And I jumped right on that link! Thanks!
2015/03/06 00:24:13
emeraldsoul
Theraputic value, check. It's still a very listenable song with nice structure, nice melody, nice Dylanish vocal presentation, and I don't really care too much for Dylan, which puts me in the something like less than 1% . . .
 
Bass down, vocals up would be my advice, given freely and worth as much.
 
cheers,
-Tom
2015/03/06 00:31:29
ward s
Thanks Tom. Very much appreciated. I was careful to throw in a few extra chords, just for you.
2015/03/08 20:35:32
ward s
after more tweaking: more voice, less bass...
 
https://soundcloud.com/wardcheese/gone-insane-2
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