OK...  it's a smooth production.  The groove and chords struck me as strangely disconnected from the lyrical topic... maybe that's just me..
 
I really like the singing tone of the lead guitar.
 
The bass is way to light in this mix.

Interesting. I like your sound overall however there is something about the drums that bothers me and doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the mix. Perhaps if you change the snare sound to something a bit deeper in pitch.
 
The lyrics are pretty dark but that's ok. The vocal has a kind of Bob Dillon vibe to it.
 
you might try distorting the vocal to get more grunge in it.
 
Good work though.
 
 

Well, I went all around behind the barn making changes to this and that, but at this point I've lost the ability to tell if I'm improving or just fiddling with knobs. I'll assume that is my inexperience poking me in the eye. 
 
https://soundcloud.com/wardcheese/gone-insane-3
 
At this point, I messed with the drums a bit, got a fatter snare and played with the eq on the kick and bass so try to differentiate a bit between the two. I also tried to just simplify the drums a little bit. And I tried to pull the background vocals a little closer in to make them just a shade more apparent. 
 
Guitarhacker Herb: The groove and chords struck me as strangely disconnected from the lyrical topic... maybe that's just me..
 
That was a really interesting observation. I don't know where to go with it, but it is making me ponder. I guess I was hearing the music as sliding into a gentle melancholy but, like you said, maybe that's just me. 
 
DCumpian Dan: I think your bass should be narrowed to center and mixed better with the kick. The wide bass just gets lost.
 
Thanks for the listen, Dan. I really admire your work. I sort of hear what you are describing, the wide bass, but I think I still need more ear training. I'm not really sure how to intervene though. The bass is pretty much just out-of-the-box (Dim. Pro). Maybe there is a setting in Dimension Pro, s stereo that could be flipped to mono... I'll mess with it some more.
 
Awes: Thanks man! I really like your stuff too!
 
Anyway, thanks everyone for your thoughts and encouragement. Maybe one day I'll write a happy song.

The very essence of the song and for the most part the performances, are your greatest attributes. Excellent!
Drums are not compelling enough, instrumentation seems a little incoherent (mix/reverb/timing), although the rhythm guitar has a very nice dreamy sound/vibe.... very slight timing anomalies 'human feel' actually works really well (guitar)!