I can hear a real connection to the lyrics in your singing, which should be a singer's goal, so nice job on that emotional connection! Particularly your vibrato!
From a mixing standpoint, are you heavily compressing the vocals? They get a little "grainy" in spots, is it maybe that artifacts are being induced? Overall I thought the vocals came across as a touch too loud as well, so you might push 'em back down a bit, and maybe bring the drums up?
And I think Chet would like it, too!
cheers,
-Tom