Reminds me somehow of Bob Dylan. Nice work. Thanks for sharing.

Very marketable, even. Your voice tells a story like the perfect voices can't. Paraphrasing David Byrne here, the more perfect the voice, the less believable the singer. I think your voice is completely good enough for this sort of thing, but more importantly, I believe the story you are telling.
 
That said,
 
please don't subject your appreciative audience to just two chords. Where's that confounded bridge? After one of your "f" chords, why not hang on a "g" for a while, then go back to what you were doing with the two chord two step. I think you need a chorus or bridge, and it should be really simple, too, but just sayin' . . . I know others will disagree . . .
 
a great song, man, and well sung.
 
-Tom

I do disagree with Tom above , I think the two-chord approach is perfect, it becomes mesmerising and I was completely hooked by this song. Love the lyrics, love the way you very slowly built things up and held the backing vocals off until right at the end. Fantastic.

Bruce Springsteen once made a 2 chord song, the Born in the Usa anthem, at least I think there was just 2 chords.

Hey this works... it simply works :)

Yes, I may have "stepped in it" a little here. There will always be listeners who dig just two chords, which is a matter of preference and therefore not really subject to comment on my part, when I say "please don't subject your listeners to just two chords" - that's pretty harsh of me, sorry.
 
Except that, "Born in the USA" has two, while "Comfortably Numb" has like 12, and which one would you rather listen to in an elevator?  :)
 
Your song is pretty excellent the way it is, I hope more people get to hear it.
 
thanks,
-Tom

Hey Tom, no offense taken and no apology needed! I'm just really gassed up that folks have responded so positively, you included. I took your comments in the most constructive way possible. One day I aspire to write a three chord tune (and in the mean time I guess I'll just take the stairs). 
 
Thanks again to everybody. It's a pretty wild feeling.

ward s
 One day I aspire to write a three chord tune (and in the mean time I guess I'll just take the stairs). 
 

 
lol. That was just worth quoting.
 

I liked it..  As others stated, it has a genuine and honest feel and performance.   Simple but effective.
 
Now if it were me...  I might think about replacing the hihat rhythm with a snare drum at some point for an almost slow and deliberate "battle" type thing.   Just a thought...   Otherwise, there's not much I would change. 
 

Cool tune. Glad I listened to it in the morning, might have been a bit close to the bone if had of been 2 a.m.