This is a work in progress and I mixed it with headphones. Made with Sonar X1 Studio. Comments welcome!
P.S. I meant to post another tune but I got bored of it's chorus so I thought maybe this would be better.
kakku
 
https://soundcloud.com/madrigal7/betapop

Overall mix sounds pretty good. I like the voice changes.
Maybe some pattern/tempo changes would be effective.
All in all, a good start.

Thank you for your nice comment Robert. I agree that at least tempo changes would improve this tune. Also, I'm glad the mix was not too bad because my nice studio monitors are unavailable to me for a long time.
kakku

Sounds pretty good, but I'm listening on headphones. I'm not sure how the bass will translate to a bigger system. Nice melody, but the song needs more development. Also, you really should learn to program your own drum patterns. You'll enjoy it after you get the hang of it.
 
Regards,
Dan
 

Thank you Dan for your nice comment and tips. I admit it would probably improve my tune if I started doing drum programming. I tried to add some drum samples to my track but I found it difficult to find the right ones.
kakku

This is a nice sounding soundtrack that would feel at home in a film.  Programming your own drums may help, but at least consider turning down the HH a bit.  Otherwise, as Dan suggested, a bit more development can only help.

Thank you Lynn for your nice comment and tips. I will return to this tune and try make some fixes.
kakku

yea...love the movement....I dont much to keep me happy (composition wise) so this was a pleasure!!!

Thank you thepogue for your nice comment!
kakku