Previous Arrangement
https://www.mediafire.com/?19uagz35k0z6tp1
 
New Arrangement
https://soundcloud.com/joshua-barnes/juice
 
New Arrangement - 2
https://soundcloud.com/joshua-barnes/juice-f
 
The "Juice" tune, has taken it's final turn I think. Some of you may recall it started with a fragment...where it started to where it is, is just pure insanity...but the effort has been worth the value of the experience.
 
It's NOT complete. This is still in the concept phase with more to come, but hopefully not much more. My songwriter friend and I need to put some final thoughts into this and we hope that this process has helped us refine OUR joint song writing process. 
 
PLEASE PLEASE review. Be harsh, be nice. Be you...but most of all, what we want to know is, can you hear this on a radio, or a movie soundtrack. That's what we want to know.

Joshua, I'm getting pop-ups on your page, and it may be scaring people away.  Can you post on Soundcloud or Soundclick?

This sounds already very good. But I think it might be best to shorten it to about 4 minutes maximum just to make it commercially more effective. I might be alone with this opinion though. In movies songs can be longer I think. Very nice melody and well sung and played.
kakku

Here it is on Soundcloud.
 
https://soundcloud.com/joshua-barnes/juice
 
 

The soundcloud link in your first post is fine but like Lynn I get strong warnings about the mediafire site wanting to steal security data.  Consequently I can not do a compare but the version on soundcloud sound very well mixed nice balance across the sound stage and spectrum.  Vocal nicely placed and balanced against the rest of the band and backing vox.
 
Thanks for sharing.

Joshua, this is a terrific song, and I have nothing to add except, finish it!  I just replied to your PM.  See you soon and go Royals!

Good song, good vocal, well performed, and mix sounds fine to my ears.

I liked that a lot!!  The only "correction" I would offer is more of a niggle, but I think I might lower the volume of the guitar to be more in proportion with the piano (both of which are very well played incidentally) and maybe add a tad more reverb since the guitar seems very forward compared to both the piano and vocal.  But that's just me.

I want to clarify one thing. When I said it would be a good idea to shorten it to about 4 minutes maximum just to make it commercially more effective, I meant that because radios usually play short about 3 to 4 minute long songs, as you have noticed, so for maximum radio play maybe do also like a radio edit.
kakku

New Arrangement - 2
https://soundcloud.com/joshua-barnes/juice-f
 
Weak eyes hide no lies
This our moment of truth, I see you through
Do you feel I need to improve
Well it all falls down on you
I get a funny feelin' that
Maybe in the aftermath
fairytales come true
 
A little more empathy
A little more juice for me
I see what you're going through
it's true
Yeah, Yeah, Yeah, Yeah
 
Lady, maybe you give me a sign
Cause I got nothing to lose, you're the proof
Come on over let me free your mind
Just a little bit of time for you...with a little bit of love for you
Give me that right away to you
 
 
Sittin back, thinking on you
just flowing with you, rolling to you
it's true that I've been too loose
But it all falls down on you
I get a funny feelin' that
Maybe in the aftermath
fairytales come true
 
A little more empathy
A little more juice for me
I see what you're going through
it's true
Yeah, Yeah, Yeah, Yeah