http://stabilitynetwork.blob.core.windows.net/g-tunes/20140924_Susan_02_SendTheHounds.mp3
 
I'm a little more aggressive with this sound than I usually am. I'm afraid it's too busy. Too much guitar. too much goofy stuff.
 
But then, I kinda like it.

Sounds good to me

I think the lead guitar playing needs a bit more practice but the melody is very good which is ofc what matters most. I also very much like the singing.
kakku

This song has potential, but I agree with kakku about the guitar playing-it's not ready for prime time.  The other issue that I hear is that the overall mix is muddy on my system.  If you cut frequencies around 200-250hz, it might help clear things up.  A slight boost around 3000hz would give this a little sparkle.  Also, if you spread things in the panning, it would help to open up this mix and give it some breathing space.  Otherwise, good effort and good luck.

That guitar player!

Ok, back to the woodshed. ☺

Interesting song, the lyrics are good, avoiding cliche's. There's a fair amount of out of tune (lead guitar) or out of key stuff (synth arpeggios) going on though, which is a shame. I'd be inclined to strip this back at the start and then add elements gradually to build the song.

If it were me...   The lead guitar parts sound a bit rushed and just slightly out of tune with the keys (?) playing in unison, the high pitched pad could use some variation, perhaps with filtering or maybe coming in and out of sections, and I'd remove some mids from the rhythm part on the right for more clarity.   I might also pan the lead vocal (sounds good!) just a little more center with a little delay.  
 
On a positive note, it sure seems like you have something worthwhile spending the extra time!
 

Thanks guys!
 
The matching key part to the guitar is done with a GR20 guitar Synth. There are 3 parts actually. The guitar part which is exactly what I played. The GR20 Synth part which is sorta close. And the Midi sent to Sonar which doesn't catch a lot of the bends and the slides... hammer on pull offs. I actually really like it that it doesn't track exactly. It's a bit like a lingering ghost.
 
The different synths take pitch bends differently. It's all hopelessly goofy and fun.
 
It's on my list to return to it, but I've got 2 hours of 12 track recording to mix and I'm making a 16 track on Friday, so I may never get back to this. I'm not in the band or anything. I was just trying to have some fun with a quick idea recording I made for my female vocalist friend to send to her out of town bandmates.
 
I'm just the guy with mics for her. My part was just goofy fun, and I still like it. I've listened to it a few more times. The stuttering rhyth... the key shifts and goofy sounds... the play with the decimator biFilter. It's a smile for me.

The higher arp synth is the midi I recorded for the bass part transposed up. It's pretty simple and I do have sign draw on the volume envelope for that one so it does oscillate some.
 
And I don't mean that I don't care about this track. I really do. I just well... like it bad I guess.
 
One thing I did do is leave a guitar part when I recorded the bass part with my guitar synth. I put a bass pedal into GR20 and left the guitar sound in addition to the gr20 bass sound. Then took the midi, shifted it up an octave and put it on an arp to Rapture.
 

Oh and btw, SteveC, there is a delay on the vocal but it's lost in the soupy mess. :-)
The delay on vocal is dotted eigth at 17% feedback and -20 dB level. the filter peaks around 1.2K. Saturation is on and there are 2 biFilter's stacked on the vocal.