RobertB
Very pretty. Bit already wrote what I would have.
Love that LP sailing around.

Thanks Bob!

Luverly mate
 
- glad you're still part of the kingdom

Guitarpima
Wow! I love this song! It's original yet has flavors of Jim Croce and Dave Mason.
 
Thank you for sharing.

Thanks Robert. I've heard of those guys, but not much by them. Will investigate...

The BandNineTeen
It gave me goosebumps... 10 on 10.
 
(sorry, having trouble with the whole login thing again, so this is a different account)

It gives me goosebumps too Robby.
 
Yeah, the log-in thing..that would be because you got banned..again... Here's an idea..try keeping it about the music.

great composition, and a great feel.
 
it was very quiet, i assume this was not mastered?
it sounds better turned way up...
it is reminscent of gabriel on some of genesis early mellow stuff..
 
at 5:21 it is getting long, for only having 1 or 2 basic chord changes...
that said,
it has a nice reflective and calm vibe,
so it works over time.
 
i wonder if a key modulation in the entire middle section, dropping back down to the current key, for the final reprise,
wouldn't be a better choice?
 
really nice tune

This is a wonderful song!  Tim's voice has the texture that sends this song over the top and delivers the lyrics so well.  Even though this song is a little quiet, as Bat says, it breathes and has good dynamics which gives this life.  Kudos to the both of you!

Hey James,
I really like this!  Love Tim's voice, haven't heard any in a while!  love the electric lead and the pad.  acoustic sounds really nice, too.
 
I think I agree with bat that I could have used a modulation or something to shake it up a little for the length of the song.
 
but all in all, really really nice work!

Wookiee
Nice job James and Tim very reminiscent of early Genesis, I am thinking Nursery Crime - Harlequin 
 

Thanks John

Great song + nice mix, good job!

craigb
Heh, no "Screw you" any more.  Sounds like you changed things without losing any of the song's feel - good job!   I know I made the comment (and, I guess, others did too?) that after Headless Cross it just seemed a bit jarring, but not bad!  This IS better though IMO.

Thanks Craig. I understand exactly what Tim was conveying with the original first verse, but I get that some people would find it jarring.