Here is a new one of mine. I personified a thing (Charity) with a name to describe it, so the song is about "her". FWIW, I didn't forget about that other song and I appreciate all of your comments. I'm just taking awhile to get it completely mixed....so thank you to all who commented on it.
 
https://soundcloud.com/starise/when-charity-smiles
 
When Charity Smiles c2014 Tim Smith
 
When Charity Smiles
When Charity smiles, rain and wind all go away, when Charity smiles it's gonna be a brand new day.
When Charity smiles she drives the shadows all away,when Charity smiles, I know we'll make it all the way.
She lets her light shine, she lets her light shine,
She does not envy, does not boast,seeks the good in me the most,
Keeps no journal of wrongs I've done, seeks the good for everyone
Charity smile, Charity smile
Charity smiles,Charity smiles,Charity smiles,Charity smiles,Charity smiles,Charity smiles it makes everything alright- Charity smiles
When Charity smiles I feel her kindness all around,when Charity smiles, it touches all who look her way,
She lets her light shine, she lets her light shine,she lets her light shine in- repeat
 
 
 
 

You are pumping the tracks out. This is another feel good tune. Once again most enjoyable.
 
 

This was another remix..bumped for further comment....and thanks Gus!!

Nice song. I like the vocalist - clear, clean and not really pitchy... is that you?
 
Mix-wise, I'd bring up the drums a tad, and also the bass. The whole mix lacks in the bottom end.
 
Are these live drums? The intro is a little busy. And the timing floats around a little. But overall you've got some good basics to start with. Good work!

Tim, this is a fun song to listen to.  The lyrics and arrangement are clever, and overall, the song is a joy to hear.  I like your vocal in this!  Your songwriting has managed to stay fresh, though you have a certain style that I call "Starise" which is undeniably you.  Well done!

Ruben- Yes the vocals are me. I I have made some more adjustments last night to this, hopefully cleared up a few things.Thanks for listening!
Lynn- I'm really glad to see you back here! Thanks for your comments. You're a great mixer and I appreciate your insights.

well done.. enjoyable song.. good vocals and sounds

Another nice one.

Very good song , I like it …nice message and energy 
 
Kenny

I posted on this last night, but looks like the forum gremlins ate it. Anyway, I wanted to say that this is probably one of my favorites that I've heard from you Tim. Love the melody and vocals and the whole thing comes together really well. I think the bass and kick could use a boost, and the drums could stand a little more definition, but all in all, I really like this one. Reminds me of an old band called Starcastle, which I'm sure you've never heard of, but you would like them I'll wager.
 
Regards,
Dan