Hi all
 
Think I've maybe started running before I can walk on this one! Posted up my first ever mix (of another bands song) a few months back. This now, is my first attempt at writing, recording and mixing my own track. Need to write/record some vocals yet, but am interested to hear (read) your thoughts on the mixing of the instrumental version.
 
https://soundcloud.com/da...ree-judges-rough-mix-1
 
Thanks 

Nice, look forward to the vocals.

rebel007
Nice, look forward to the vocals.

Thanks, struggling with the melody at the moment. Thought I'd throw this out there for some mixing feedback, first attempt and all.

Interesting start I will keep an ear out for the vocal version

very cool track so far. love the changing sections. only real advice i could say is the muted guitar notes sound too tiny. too small.
 
the opening bit sounds kinda like tracy chapman "fast car" (not that that's a bad thing or anything haha)

Wookiee
Interesting start I will keep an ear out for the vocal version

Thanks, have sat down a couple of times to write a melody but struggling. Think I'll have to take a week away from it and revisit next weekend. 
 

polarbear
very cool track so far. love the changing sections. only real advice i could say is the muted guitar notes sound too tiny. too small.
 
the opening bit sounds kinda like tracy chapman "fast car" (not that that's a bad thing or anything haha)

Thanks, from memory, I did boost up the high frequencies on the muted parts, will definitely revisit it when I next have a tinker.
 
Strange you mention Tracy Chapman, I wrote the opening part a couple of years ago, a few months later the the other half was watching X-Factor/Got Talent and I was unfortunate enough to be in the same room. Someone sang 'fast car' and I had never heard it before but said to her I recognised it and it sounded a blatant rip off of another song I had heard, but couldn't remember what. Starting to think it was this track I was thinking of. Think I owe her an apology 

haha nice

So, I've had a play, unfortunately still struggling with the melody!! I've removed the reverb from the drums and placed a more subtle one on the master bus. Also tweaked the EQ on the low end of the acoustic guitar and kick drum, hopefully to clear out some of the muddiness. I did play with removing the techno drums, sounded even more disjointed to me though so kept them in.
 
Have left my first attempt on there to so they can be compared. Although still not great, I am much happier with it now than the first attempt. Still work to be done though. Will probably leave any more changes until vocals are in so it can all fit together nicely.
 
Better??
 
https://soundcloud.com/da...ree-judges-rough-mix-2

Definitely better. Really sounds great man.

I too thought it sounded like something I head heard before. I didn't know the song but knew I had heard it on the radio.
 
When I write something that ends up sounding too similar to a song everyone else knows.....I scrap it and try again.
 
Another option is to rewrite it based loosely on what you have. Try to make it flow and be cohesive in respects to the genre.
 
For what it's worth..... I heard several really sweet ideas in that for several different songs. I'd look at breaking out the best one to you and work on that first. Leave Ms Chapman's sound-alike on the shelf for now.