Hi Daryl,
Even if I english is not my native language,I really appreciate your lyrics and I am thankfull you take time to type.. It is much easier for "guys like me " ( makes me think about Aimee Mann sorry sorry..nothing to do with the job at hand)
You are a poet and you are an author.
The song is really easy to listen to and your voice makes perfectly the job.
Because I am french I must say something which drives backwards... And it is that according to me ,the music is
just a little too much in front of the vocal in the chorus ( which actually to my ears sounds like a pre chorus introducing the nice small instrumental bridge).
Good job ,thanks for sharing.
All the best.
Olivier