Hi, Tony, this is another good song from you, and you seem to be stringing quite a few of them together, lately.  You must have enough for a CD by now, or getting close.  I applaud you!  Don't worry about Robbie; he's just showing you his own personal source for correcting his own grammatical errors.  Just go with the flow.

Sounds real good ! My only observation is that I think the bass guitar could  come up just a little bit! Good job on it just like it is..

drma173
What the ****

I'm sorry, I know you weren't born here, and haven't been here long, or had the advantage of being educated in our system? And therefore struggle more than others with the language? I should have considered that. My apologies, considering all of your challenges, i.e., new to English, new to this country, and what not? It could have been much worse. So keep it up! Learn the language? And the sky's the limit!! Don't give up on those English classes? I know it may not be easy putting things in the wrong order the way we do? But keep at it, you'll get it down one day. Have confidence in your abilities! We believe in you. YOU can become a U.S. citizen if you try!! We believe in you...

Hey Tony
 
I dig the beat on this. I like the bass and the synths.The bass sits well in the mix on this. It isn't my genre, but I can appreciate what it is. I can tell you worked hard on getting it right. You don't like the song? What parts don't you like?
 
Great job...don't beat yourself up on the song...if you don't like something on it, maybe wait awhile until you get other ideas. I think you have a good song here.

Grow up!!!! Why do you always take shots at people? Do you even receive attention at home? Your just a wana be bully, but I bet in real life you just some has been low life creeper.......

The Band19

drma173
What the ****

I'm sorry, I know you weren't born here, and haven't been here long, or had the advantage of being educated in our system? And therefore struggle more than others with the language? I should have considered that. My apologies, considering all of your challenges, i.e., new to English, new to this country, and what not? It could have been much worse. So keep it up! Learn the language? And the sky's the limit!! Don't give up on those English classes? I know it may not be easy putting things in the wrong order the way we do? But keep at it, you'll get it down one day. Have confidence in your abilities! We believe in you. YOU can become a U.S. citizen if you try!! We believe in you...

The Band19

drma173
What the ****

I'm sorry, I know you weren't born here, and haven't been here long, or had the advantage of being educated in our system? And therefore struggle more than others with the language? I should have considered that. My apologies, considering all of your challenges, i.e., new to English, new to this country, and what not? It could have been much worse. So keep it up! Learn the language? And the sky's the limit!! Don't give up on those English classes? I know it may not be easy putting things in the wrong order the way we do? But keep at it, you'll get it down one day. Have confidence in your abilities! We believe in you. YOU can become a U.S. citizen if you try!! We believe in you...

 
No wonder a lot of people who used to post their songs here don't post anything at all here anymore. 
 
 
 
 

Sorry, it double posted..... 

Tony, the music is good, but the Spanish always throws the song for me, but I know you are trying to reach your own and so that's alright. Very electronica beat to this and you did a good job on the mix. Don't be upset with Robbie, that's what he want, so don't go there. What he is saying in reality is he doesn't do Spanish either and is wishing you could also sing one all the way through in English for us English/ non Spanish understanding people and one in Spanish for the Spanish understanding people. He just don't know how to do it properly yet. He's still trying to graduate from the 3rd grade, but like he said, he's working on it.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Findenzio,
 
How are you man? I'm a fan of your music and think you have awesome production skillz when it comes to this genre, so the first thing I would say it do not stop! Your one of the best for this radio pop production on this forum IMO.
 
This track is a very good tune but needs some refinement.
 
(1) The chorus needs to stand out a little more, on the first listen I didn't get it. I would put in a sustained pad in the high octave range (not on the first chorus though) and I would double a vocal up singing in a higher range. I would also play a synth in the background doubling the melody line "first class" (could be a good title name).
 
(2)The intro guitar is really cool and really would like to hear more of it. The synth that follows, although works could do with being sent more the background and letting that guitar plucking do more work. I would also introduce it later in the song (a good point is where the kick drum comes in on a verse near the middle, plenty of sonic space there). Also I would tweak that synth if you can, sounds a bit "cheapy", something with more sine wave movement maybe.
 
(3) I think your vocals on the rap need to be distinguished from your singing vocals somehow to help differentiate. How about a more delayed effect on your singing vocals while shorter reverb on the raps, and doubled up.
 
(4) Your vocals could so with a little brush up too, I know you have been on here before and I understand we all have what we have. Theyre fine, but could do with some melodyne on the singing parts and play with the beat a bit more on the rap, spit those words in between the snare beats (easier said that done I know!).
 
(5) I think the arrangement doesn't help this track. All the parts are good but not structured for ease of the listener. That "ooh,ooh,ooh" part is great in the first verse, but should really come back in again in the song besides the end. The second part of the first verse has a rap, then the second verse starts with a rap. Then verse 1 comes back in at the end?! I'd bring the chorus back in at 0:58, that rap (although really cool) is dropping the momentum, keep it for later. It needs a bridge which really changes the song up (and help lengthen it up to 3 minutes). How about after the third chorus, stripping the song down, to those "ooh,ooh,oohs" and the guitar intro type thing, building it up with a filtered arp and snare movement while singing ("fight if off" etc and chanting every second line "wonderful to live/First class") before belting back in with the final chorus. For example, the part you have at the end with the snare clap, is perfect to start a bridge with. End the song after the chorus with the ooh,ooh,ooh and intro guitar again. I'm I making it any clear?
 
(6) BTW I like the spanish language in this, really give it some character. Maybe a section to many in spanish, but definietly do not write it all in english.
 
 
Good stuff mate, I wrote a long response cos I like it (these may sound negative but they are only suggested improvements on a damn solid catchy track). If you need any other set of ears I'm happy to help or if you would like me to sing on a section to beef it up, send me the lyrics and I can notch out a take for you to use at your disposal.
 

*Robby, I don't know what's going on with that last response. Cut it out mate. Go make some music!
 
Cian
 
 
 
 

It's funny... we have people here from Europe, Turkey and other locations that sing in their native tongue with no (or few) complaints.  Nowhere here do I see any indications that this is an English only forum.  I don't see Mr. Robertson complaining to others that use English as their second language, and trying to correct them.  He wasn't complaining about the song, anyway, but the fact that Tony didn't use the past tense of the verb "fix" in the post prior to his.  Therefor, his attack seemed personal and not general in nature.
 
Those of you who frequent the Sonar X series forum are probably well aware that a number of posters (some with post counts in the tens of thousands) don't use grammar correctly all the time.  Many native born English speakers commonly don't know the difference between the words to and too.  Some don't know the difference between adverbs and adjectives (i.e. good and well).  And, some don't realize that there's no word "alot" in the English language (it's two words-a lot).  But Tony wasn't coming here for grammar lessons, he was here for advice on his music.
 
This is about as close to a TOS violation as I've seen in a long time.  A little tolerance would go a long way, and if Mr. R really tests out in the mid 130's, like he claims, he'll understand this (btw, the mid 130's is still 10 to 15 points below Mensa level).  Peace.