Thank you Space Alf, for the comments and for listening. I'm heading back in to tweek the mix a bit. I'll post it here when I get it done.... probably as a box.com link.
 
I will keep your comments and all the others in mind as I work.

Nice tune Herb.
Love the concept and lyric.
The singer doesn't seem to be able to hit a note but slides/bends into the pitch, very often. (give me a cha-----ance). 
This really detracted from the song for me.

Solid song, concept & production. Good job! -Shawn

Thanks Tim & Shawn for listening.

Nice tune and lyrics Herb.

Very nicely done Herb. Nice instrumentation and vocals. Nice balanced sound throughout. Enjoyed the lyrics also.
 
Peace and Blessings, John

Thanks Daryl & John.
 
Daryl, hows that retirement thing going?  Got time for the studio or did other things suddenly crop up?

Like the lead vocal sound in the verse.  You were able to smooth out the high end but leave the air.  As the song builds, she sounds too trebly like too much high-mids.  There is a ringing in her tone from that issue I think.
 
Love the arrangement.  The dobro is really nice.  The strings could use some lo-mids to give them more body.
 
The song is really nice and I love the lyrics.   

Herb,
 
I've been working on a live act all winter, setting up to do some shows... now I have arthritis in my neck and fingers and carpal tunnel in both hands, may have to do some surgery.   So my recording has been taking a hit from my physical ills and all the many hours I've put into my act.   PT has made things better and I have a bunch of new tunes in the works and a number in the finishing stages.  I will post a few soon, I hope.  But mostly working on the live solo show and working on my finger picking skills.  Having a ton of fun with that.
 
Typing and mousing is hard so I haven't been on because it's been hard to use the computer... still is but it's better.   A lot of new faces here, and some of the old ones seem scarce.
 
Daryl

Herb,
 
I've been working on a live act all winter, setting up to do some shows... now I have arthritis in my neck and fingers and carpal tunnel in both hands, may have to do some surgery.   So my recording has been taking a hit from my physical ills and all the many hours I've put into my act.   PT has made things better and I have a bunch of new tunes in the works and a number in the finishing stages.  I will post a few soon, I hope.  But mostly working on the live solo show and working on my finger picking skills.  Having a ton of fun with that.
 
Typing and mousing is hard so I haven't been on because it's been hard to use the computer... still is but it's better.   A lot of new faces here, and some of the old ones seem scarce.
 
Daryl