There but for the grace of... I forget the rest. It would be nice to hear a verse, verse, chorus verse verse, break, chorus, chorus, end from you Mr. Player? It kind of feels like what Bapu told me it feels like to be on acid (citric acid...) when I listen to most of these? This one included :-( It's a bunch of good ideas from other people? But it's disjointed, it doesn't fit together? It's like a mix tape.
Could you please, please try to do a song next time? As opposed to this? I've heard you do it, so I believe you can?
I'll even give you a title, "Rise above!" Or, "Rise above it!" Now set to work. Idle hands are "you know who's" workshop...
Even if you do a cover, it's a song? Do a cover? Step out of your comfort zone sir.